Wow! That was an intense page-turner. Anything cause in your throat or in an eye is so unpleasant. I guess the doc should have had him scoped. Thank you for a nice read...!
Thank you for the nice story. Some ghosts just never go away, huh? My favorite line was: "The air outside was so hot that it hit her like a punch in the face." It totally reflects my feelings of summers. The heat takes your breath away. Thank Heavens Fall is on its way... :<)
I liked this story. It is well-written and eerie. It provokes thoughts of what Hell might be like. The barren wasteland atmosphere is a nice setting. Thank you for a nice read.
I enjoyed this tale. I've always been a vampire fan reaching as far back as the 1950's. It's really cool that they have become so prominent in the present. My favorite line was, "psychiatrist was typing like mad on his black computer." It set the mood for the whole piece.
I don't know if my psychiatrist uses a black computer or not but I think it would be very appropriate considering what they have to deal with. Yes....they should all have black computers..... :<)
Hi.... I liked your story. My favorite line was, 'His head pounded as though there was a large, angry elephant storming about inside'. I think I'd like to see a little more about the brother and what he was doing while Sebastian and Helena were falling in love. Maybe something like, 'He silently watched the couple from the cover of the forest. Deep inside, jealousy stoked red-hot anger as they kissed'...a little of something like that to help tie the story together a little more. Also I'd like to know a little more about how Sebastian became marooned on the island...I assume he was marooned. Good luck and keeping writing...
I think this one deserves the blue ribbon! :<) I'm an Eagles fan too and this parody is so right on...LOL What a creative imagination you have. I never would have thought of this. You're just too cool...!!
Thank you again for your wonderful review of 'Dust Mystery! I was so delighted that you felt it was good enough to be on the December Mystery Newsletter.
I hope you appreciate how humble I feel to receive such a terrific review from a person of your ability. I read the Bio on your port and was very pleased to find that you've written 18 novels along with an array of short stories and poems.
I hope I'll be like you when I grow up. :<)
I found 'Crash Landing' to be excellently written. It is a perfect example of showing rather than telling. I copied it into Word and broke down parts of it to help me remember better how to show and not tell. I think your description of a plane crash in the jungle was quite vivid...I felt like I was there with Jennifer. The love scenario was very nice: sweet without being oversweet and chaste rather than graphic.
The ending was believable and appropriate. Overall, it was a really, really nice piece and I highly commend you.
I noticed that you recommended Iritegud and Harry as favorite authors. I've read a lot of Iritegud's work and he/she certainly Writes Good...! I'll have to check out Harry's work. Thank you for the recommendation.
I don't know if I've reviewed this piece before or not. I think it's well-written and tugs at the heart. To have your whole life pulled from underneath you would destroy anyone. It was interesting how you wove in and out of the feelings of the heroine shifting the terminology back and forth to heighten the pain she was feeling. I especially liked the ending sentence...it was collossal..."and the heavens cried with her."
There are some mispelled words but I review based on story content rather than grammar. I normally write my stories in Microsoft Word and then run a spell check try to find misspellings and then copy and paste them here.
I see that this story was written a long time ago. I hope my review will encourage you to write more too...! :<)
I was pleasantly surprised by this beginning chapter of "Sara's Port." I really admire those people who seek to give back to the profession. Your character was very believable to me. It's so rare to actually meet someone like that but I have met a few along the way and they are like shining beacons on a stormy sea.
It must be the ultimate high to not only be published with 3 successful novels but to have a movie made from one.
I'm so glad to have found this episode on your port! I will continue to read this work. I rarely read long works instead prefering the shorter pieces so that I can spread my limited enthusiasm around. But this work demands that I read on so read on I shall.
You are so talented and generous, I would nominate you for the recognition you deserve if I found a way. I suspect there is a lot of you in this character. You are always checking out my port, giving really valuable reviews, and building my writing ego. We truly all need a little of that. I will be most happy to visit your port often.
This is really a first-rate story. It immediately catches your attention with announcing that the moon has been gone for 3 months. I like the matter-of-factness of Bat's observation: Anyway, that happened about three months ago and things have really started to get weird. So weird, in fact, that I figured I should start to keep a journal just in case all hell breaks loose and humankind is obliterated (isn't that a cool word?).
My favorite diary entries were:
1. It was a creepy, high-pitched scream that seemed to cut through my ears and right into my brain, it was like I was feeling it instead of hearing it.
2. The bugs have gotten bigger and bigger and a few people have died. Bug-chow.
3. It picked up some old ladies little yappy dog and sucked it up like it was a milkshake or something. Crazy s***.
I think you chose a very appropriate medium to tell the stories (as journal entries). It really raises the bar, kind of like Orson Welles' War of the Worlds.
You are really talented! They should make a movie out of this one....! I hope you're getting published!
I really liked this piece. You have a nice flair for writing. The only suggestion I might make is that the want + obstacle appear just a mite earlier. Perhaps begin the story with something like: "He'd pull the plug over my dead body!" But it's a fine story in any case....good luck and write on....!
I really enjoyed this piece…it took me back to my own childhood. I'm middle-aged now and the place where I went to high school is a thousand miles away. I visit family near there every other year and still stop by the old school and reminisce. I don't have any contact with my former classmates but I still have fond memories of them and the old school. It was a small school in a small town but my memories remain strong. Thank you for helping me see that spot in my mind's eye...
It's only my opinion but I think you've got a natural flair for writing action adventures. It's a very nice 'extra' that it is a true account but you put a lot of 'life' in it. It had me wondering about what the man on the island was experiencing while waiting for his rescue. You probably wouldn't want to write a sequel to your father's heroic deed but something about a man hiding from/trying to escape from an enemy always draws my attention. Good luck in your writings, Pastor...and please, write on...!
Excellent story! I adore tales that portray vampires as tragic beings who have retained their humanity. This one has a very unique premise...I think it could easily be adapted into a novel. I would very much welcome a sequel to this! :)
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