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Review by Dustin Butler
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The dialogue is shoddy at times and seems choppy to the point at which it doesn't sound like people having an actual conversation but it tends to smooth out later in later chapters. The story itself is an interesting one and I look forward to reading further. There are a few typos in there but they are the same kind I make when I get my brain going faster than my fingers can type. I don't really relate to any of the characters that it makes it hard to read at times but there is some definite promise to the story. Keep it up though and I don't mean for my words to sound harsh.
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