I may be wrong but I do not see where this should be changed, added to or taken away from. It is obvious that the words come from the heart yet simple and solemn in their verse. It tells me that you went to war not fully comprehending what it meant to you and to the ones who did not notice that you were fighting for their freedom. It tells me you came back changed and see the world differently than what it was when you left it. It tells me you saw things that cannot be forgotten, but maybe someday you will understand the whys of it all. You returned with new understanding. Well written.
The writing was not jerky or confusing. It did remind me of one thing though. Alzheimer or dementia patients actually have these same reactions. So at first, that is what I thought I was reading. They see themselves in a shiny surface and think that someone stole their closes and are following them to do them harm. So many of actions and reactions of Jared was that way that I was surprised to find out different. This was an interesting read that makes me want to know what happens next.
I found no fault with the editing and enjoyed the read.
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