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Review of Before I go  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Mindy ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.

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*Sheriff*OVERVIEW:
Your poem is good but honestly I'm a guy who don't interest in girly poetry lol. I just like the way you share your love with people in you piece. I can tell that you have a warm heart but I'm not really sure. Just my thought.

*Sheriff*FLOW:
I like the flow of your poem. It reads good!

*Sheriff*FAVORITE LINE(S):
All parts of the last stanza are my favorite:

There’s just something about you
that is just too hard to hide
I love you more than you know
that’s what I have to say
Before I Go

It sounds sad! *Sad*

*Sheriff*GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION:
I think you did well here but there's something bothering me in reading your piece and I will list them under the suggestion heading for you to consider. Only mirror errors. *Smile*

*Sheriff*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider the phrases "right now" in line 8 and the word "onto" in line 11. I think you should avoid redundant expressions when possible because it adds no new meaning to the phrase and I'm sure that by eliminating redundant expressions you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

*Sheriff*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The expression is very clear and it also interesting but kind of sad.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Walkinbird 3 Jan 1892 ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above item in your port in celebrating your WDC Account Anniversary. Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.

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*Sheriff*COMMENT:
Your review signature is very cute and the black background is so clear. I like the message written in a cute print outline. By reading the message on the sig and I can tell that you are a ranger who can track a butterfly at night. I think I can do that but good that you can. lol

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Review of Six Weeks to Live  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*Earth* A PDG NEWBIE REVIEW *Earth*

Hello Liam ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above poetry item in your port. This is a review for the"Invalid Item" . Please remember, a review is only how I, as an individual, see your piece. Accept what you agree with, ignore that which you disagree with.

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*NoteR* OVERVIEW:
This poetry holds a powerful message that can be used as a reminder to people about how is life meant to be. This was a nice subject and I like this kind. *BigSmile*

*NoteR* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and it reads very well. The rhyme is very good as well.

*NoteR* FAVORITE LINE(S):
Every parts of the third stanza are my favorites:

For me, Death doesn't conjure fears
It's just another given.
Whether six weeks or six more years
I guess I'll just keep livin'.

*NoteR* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING:
I searched for any errors but I couldn't find any. Good Job!

*NoteR* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to keep this piece in your port for readers to read it.

*NoteR* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is wonderful and it makes me to think about life. I congratulate you on this piece. *Smile*

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
I notice that the content of this piece is covered the fact events that had happened to you in real life. Am I wrong? I think I'm not. Nice poetry! *Smile*

*Sheriff*FLOW:
I like the flow of your poem. It sounds great and especially the rhyme. Nice job!

*Sheriff*FAVORITE LINE(S):
I adore every parts of your piece but below is my best:
I found a new way

You repeated it in a good manner.

*Sheriff*GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION:
There's nothing error I noticed here. Good job!

*Sheriff*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider this part 'Running out to the car for work, I locked my keys inside. Sound faded to me and that I found it a bit unclear. Where's your key, in your car, house or somewhere in your pocket? lol

*Sheriff*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Your piece is very clear and interesting. Write more!

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"Contest Central Station" 
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello dogpack:saving 4 premium: DWG ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.


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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
This is a great idea and I'm sure that this piece could be used as an encouragement tool to writers not to stop the writing but to go further in fact that they aren't dead so they should head up. Interesting! You have a good topic here and I congratulate you for that. Impressive, yay!

*Sheriff*FLOW:
I like the flow of your poem. It sounds great and especially the rhyme. You did a nice job!

*Sheriff*FAVORITE LINE(S):
Below are my favorites:
embrace this day
full of blessings and say
I'll write with might so my spirit will take flight

*Sheriff*GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION:
I try to search for any errors but I don't see any here.!

*Sheriff*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you throw the period to end of the last stanza. I notice that it's missing and it shouldn't be.

*Sheriff*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Very clear and interesting to me. Write more!

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"Invalid Item" 
"Contest Central Station" 
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Itchy Water~fictionandverse ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.

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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
I notice that you recently wrote this free verse poetry to honor the promotion made by WDC. That's a good idea and I agree with you. The content of your piece is interesting and encouraging to other black cases here around this vast blue ocean of WDC. I honor your writing. *Smile*

*Sheriff*FLOW:
I'm the biggest fan of free verse poetry builds in rhyme and that makes me want to enjoy the flow of this piece. Sound great to me.

*Sheriff*FAVORITE LINE(S):
Below you will see my favorite parts:
It was just a moment ago
I was labeled a sideshow,
But with the change of my deco,
I am now a hero!

Yes, you are a real awesome hero! Keep up the good work.

*Sheriff*GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION:
I don't see any errors in your piece. Good job.

*Sheriff*SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to keep on sharing this piece with members of WDC and I'm that black cases will be encouraged just by reading your piece.

*Sheriff*OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Nice free style poem you have written here and I'm inspired by reading your piece. Write more!

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"Contest Central Station" 
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Review of No Light  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tony ! I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please, keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.

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This is a special review in celebrating this International Youth Day to honor you. Enjoy your day and happy writing!!

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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
Hey I like the structure of your poetry it's so great! Keep on working hard. *Smile*

*Sheriff* FLOW:
This pieces' flow reads very well. Nice job!

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
I adore all parts of your piece. Sound interesting to me.

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
There are no mistakes that I could see in your piece.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to keep on sharing this with members of WDC. Between that how if you change those two words *Right* 'for more' to 'to see the' and it will written this way*Right* 'so we waited to see the sunlight.' That just my thought.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
I enjoy reading your wonderful poetry. Write more!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello lilypad ! I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please, keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.

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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
This poetry is long in scale and that I enjoy reading it but some parts of it is confusing to me. If you could spare your time to proofread it, I think you'll see what I meant. Between that the idea is interesting. *BigSmile*

*Sheriff* FLOW:
If you could consider your word choice, I'm sure your piece could flow read very well. I adore the rhyme because it sounds great and interesting.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
The last stanza is my favorite.

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
I will just highlight a few errors for you below:
You used the word 'bolden' in line 11 of the second stanza and I notice that it's confusing. You can fix the problem by checking that word using your dictionary. *ThumbsUp*
In line 3 of the fourth stanza the phrase, 'While maiden who had stole my heart' should be written this way, 'While maiden who had stolen my heart'
Note: You need to use a past participle verb form after this auxiliary verb. The words has, had, have, and were are auxiliary verbs that you should follow with a past participle.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to proofread your piece carefully before you put it up in your port for the reader.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is nice. Write more! *Smile*

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Review of Myself and I  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
It goods to read a poem about someone with his/her like/dislike. I seem to know the real you by reading your piece.

*Sheriff* FLOW:
This pieces' flow reads very well and the rhyme is sound great. Nice job!

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
These parts are my favorites which I liked most:
My pictures tell stories
And my stories tell my past
About all of my glories
And imagination so vast

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
No spelling mistake that I could see.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to keep on sharing your poetry.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece tells me that you surely know yourself. Keep on writing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Kleo ! I will be doing a review for the above item in your port. Please, keep in mind that you have my utmost esteem for sharing your work with us, no matter what my rating or comment may seem to implicate. All the suggestions made here are only opinions proposed to improve your work, and as the writer, you extremely have the final say on your own creation.

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*Sheriff* OVERVIEW:
This poetry is too short but sound dangerous to me. It brings me back to the circa 7th century BC lol. I try to figure out this kind of poem but still I can't tell what this kind. I think I should try to write my own like yours.

*Sheriff* FLOW:
This pieces' flow reads very well and that is great.

*Sheriff* FAVORITE LINE(S):
I like these part because it sound great but again sound dangerous:
Weeping, withering, agonizing

*Sheriff* GRAMMAR/SPELLING/PUNCTUATION:
There are no mistakes here.

*Sheriff* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
Nothing to point but please keep on sharing this poetry.

*Sheriff* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
This piece is too short but it have a deep thought. Write more.

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Review of A Poem Of Love  
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Earth* A PDG NEWBIE REVIEW *Earth*


Hello Sticktalker ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ . I will be doing a review for the above poetry item in your port. This is a review for the"Invalid Item" . Please remember, a review is only how I, as an individual, see your piece. Accept what you agree with, ignore that which you disagree with.

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*NoteR* OVERVIEW:
Your idea of trying to clear a deep thought of man’s concern of love is absolutely clarified. I honour your great effort. *BigSmile*

*NoteR* FLOW:
This pieces' flow reads very well and the reader isn't sidetracked by excess adjectives.

*NoteR* FAVORITE LINE(S):
I liked this stanza the best -- it paints a very clear image of a baby reaching out and grabs hold of his father's finger in a strong grasp: *Down*

A man holds a finger
The child not in anger
Holds it very tight

*NoteR* GRAMMAR, PUNCTUATION AND SPELLING:
There are no mistakes that I could see in your piece, except a minor error in forgetting to placed a period to end the last line of the last stanza.

*NoteR* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I just wanted to highlight one thing that bothers me while reading the first line of your poem. In the first line of the first stanza the phrase, ‘one can love in many different ways’ should be considered because I think, it’s better to remove the word different and leave the word ‘many’ because you should avoid redundant expressions when possible in fact that it adds no new meaning to the phrase and by eliminating that your piece will give the reader in a more clear and concise approach.

*NoteR* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Great poem Lyle! The idea is true about love and it makes me to think of myself with the love I had in mind. The clarification is very obvious and I congratulate you for that. I really enjoy reading your piece. Keep up the great work. *Smile*


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Review of SEARCHING MYSELF  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A RAOK UPGRADE BRIGADE REVIEW


Hello sanu ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for the above item in your port. Please keep in mind that my review is only how I see your piece. Accept what you agree with and dismiss what didn't work for you at all.

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*Star* My ratings basically complies the rating guidelines below and I ask that you do the same for mine.*Star*

"How Should I Rate Items on Writing.Com?" 


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OVERVIEW:
Your idea of writing a poem regarding yourself is a common way poets do. I appreciate the effort. *BigSmile*

FLOW:
This piece flows well and the choice of words is good in supporting the situation.


GRAMMAR, SPELLING AND PUNCTUATION:
There are no mistakes that I could see in your piece. That’s good!

SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to remove the unnecessary spaces. You need to re-arrange your stanza. I think your piece can be great if you put 4 lines in each stanza. Also you need to capitalize the word 'I' as it represent yourself. It's better to follow the writing rules.

OVERALL IMPRESSION:
Nice poem! Write more! *Smile*



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In affiliation with RAOK Upgrade Brigade Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
A RAOK UPGRADE BRIGADE REVIEW

Hello The StoryMistress ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for the above item in your port. Please keep in mind that my review is only how I see your piece. Accept what you agree with and dismiss what didn't work for you at all.

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*Star* My ratings basically complies the rating guidelines below and I ask that you do the same for mine.*Star*

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COMMENT:
I read all the information you provided in the above item for members of WDC regarding rating pieces. I have some chuckles just after reading this helpful information because it nearly 6 months active in the community and I just come across this guidelines. The information shows all my failures in rating items which is funny and embarrassing in some ways. Reading this flow information gave me a chance to know about rating items which goals is to tell the author the truth about his/her piece rather than dishonest with rating which meant nothing to them. I now clear about rating items and will start rating pieces following the rating guidelines members expected to follow.



OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The information you provided in this piece is flowed well in the content. The points you discussed are very clear to me as a reader. It’s was a nice piece and I recommend all WDC members to consider reading this piece before rating an item especially newbies who are in the community.


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Review of Make God Smile  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


This is a special review to honor your WDC Account Anniversary.


Hello Daizy May ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your item "Make God Smile" . Please keep in mind that my review is solely my opinion. You may accept what you agree with and ignore what you disagree with.

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*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
It’s my pleasure to offer you a review for the first time in honor your WDC Account Birthday. Congratulation! Between that you are my second friends here at WDC next to Sticktalker and the first member of this wonderful community to receive my review in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  where I belong. *Smile* I hope you’ll be fine now that I’m at your port to read something that will bless me. Whoever read this piece will be blessed. Thanks a lots for your willingness to share all your writings about your faith. You are truly a believer and a kind woman to deal with.I am glad that I have a chance in real life to get to know you. Without God and all the knowledge and wisdom in this world, I will not able to know you Daizy. I always pray for that. I appreciated all you do for me. Gps to support me and especially words of encouragement. All makes me a better young man as of today. I honor you. Regarding this piece, all your saying were all true and I believe you.

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
Daizy your piece is great because it flows well. Words are played well and that makes it unique. I applaud you for that.

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
I really love to read this poem and please allow me to bookmark it in my aurora web browser.

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
The writing is very clear and concise to me as your reader. Nothing makes this piece confuses and that makes it a must-read poetry. Great job here Daizy!

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
I suggest you to keep on sharing this poem with members. I know they will be very keen to read and especially to review it. Wish you all the best and I can’t wait to talk to you again. God bless you.*Smile*

*Bird* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Bird*
This piece must be read by all. I was caught here. Thank you Daizy! I will be back to your port to review your other pieces. *Smile*

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I am very honored to read your story. Keep up the good work!

Best regards to you from your humble servant
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*Bird* *Bird* *Bird* *Bird* *Bird* *Bird*

It’s in my attention when people talk about God. I rather tune up and give all my attention to, than to rotten them. ~M.T.Metutera

*Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang*

If you are viewing my review, please visit my port to give me a review or two. I'm willing to see your reviews so that I can tell whether my pieces are good or need an improvement. Thank you!

*Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw*

To end my work I will say congratulation to you with your writing. I wish your paper will go smooth and your pen will never lose ink until you meet your writing goals, so please keep on reading, writing and learning. Wherever you are, good luck and be blessed all the way you go!

*BigSmile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *BigSmile*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
THIS REVIEW BROUGHT TO YOU BY BREAKER ON BEHALF OF THE "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello Daizy May ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your port item "Cats, Rats and Baseball Bats" . Remember that my review is just my personal point of view. You may disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

*ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
It’s my pleasure to offer you a review for the first time in honor your WDC Account Birthday. Congratulation! Between that you are my second friend here at WDC and the fouth member of the community to receive my review in affiliation with my new group "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" *Smile* You are lucky Daizy. Anyway I am very sad that I haven’t seen you around at scroll, why? I pray that you will get well and that you could happy with your family. God bless you! I read your poem twice before I come up with my comment and I found that your writing is wonderful but that not strange to me in fact that I know that you are one of my best. I am so inspired to read this poem. I thank you for that because you make my day.

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
Daizy your piece is great and the rhyme is awesome. Words are played well and that makes it unique.

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
I can’t point you my favorite lines here because all fit and I like it all.

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
The writing is very clear and concise to me as your reader. Nothing makes this piece slack and that makes it a must-read poetry. Great job here Daizy!

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
I suggest to keep on sharing this poem with members. I know they will be very keen to read and especially to review it. Lastly but not the least, I wish you are well with sickness and all. I can’t wait to see your smile again here around the community. God bless you and please try your best not to make that sickness victory upon you. Always think that you are strong. *Smile*

*Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw*


Thank you very much for your time to write this inspiring work. Keep your pen inked and write on!

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Writing is a habit but thanks to those who take time to get the work done. It's a hard job to pass the ideas from the mind and out to the papers. They are meant so much to the story world; I should probably honor them in their hardworking profession. They are the greatest writers of all times. ~M.T.Metutera

*UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO*


If you are viewing my review, please visit my port to give me a review or two. I'm willing to see your reviews so that I can tell whether my pieces are good or need an improvement.

*MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB*

To end my work I will say congratulation to you with your writing. I wish your paper will go smooth and your pen will never lose ink until you meet your writing goals, so please keep on reading, writing and learning. Wherever you are, good luck and be blessed all the way you go!

*BigSmile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *BigSmile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
THIS REVIEW BROUGHT TO YOU BY BREAKER ON BEHALF OF THE "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


This is a special review to honor your WDC Account Anniversary.

Hello Stallion ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your port item "My Light and My Salvation" . Remember that my review is just my personal point of view. You may disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

*ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
It’s my pleasure to offer you a review for the first time in honor your WDC Account Birthday. Congratulation! Between that you are the second moderator and the third member of the community to receive my review in affiliation with my new group "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" *Smile* You are lucky but I am too because I think I’m the first newbie from Kiribati in the Central Pacific to jump to your port to review your item that I think it deserves a review. I read the lyric before I come up with my comment and I found that it’s so great! Now I can tell that you are a believer. I am so inspired to read this song you have created. I wonder if you could produce a beat and sing the song with digital beat, I think that would be great!

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
I try to read your piece aloud to try to figure out it but I found that the pace is good. It flows well from the start to the last part. Words are played well and that makes it exclusive.

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
I mostly liked the lines with the name Jesus and also line thirteen ‘You are the Light of the Life we receive.’ *Smile* I feel like I want to sing and praise His name this morning. I’m blessed to read your song.

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
I try to search for any writing mechanical errors there but nothing I found proving that your piece is great!

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
I suggest you to try to produce a beat for this lyric poem so that people can sing your song. *Smile*


*Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw*


Thank you very much for your time to write this inspiring work. Keep your pen inked and write on!

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It’s in my attention when people talk about God. I rather tune up and give all my attentions to, than to rotten them.. ~M.T.Metutera

*UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO*


If you are viewing my review, please visit my port to give me a review or two. I'm willing to see your reviews so that I can tell whether my pieces are good or need an improvement.

*MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB*

To end my work I will say congratulation to you with your writing. I wish your paper will go smooth and your pen will never lose ink until you meet your writing goals, so please keep on reading, writing and learning. Wherever you are, good luck and be blessed all the way you go!

*BigSmile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *BigSmile*

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Rated: E | (5.0)
THIS REVIEW BROUGHT TO YOU BY BREAKER ON BEHALF OF THE "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

Hello SHERRI GIBSON ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ a new member of your group and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your port item "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" . Remember that my review is just my personal point of view. You may disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

*ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV*


*Idea* COMMENTS *Idea*
First of all I would like to deliver my words of thanks to ~WhoMe???~ for her kindness in giving me the opportunity to join this wonderful group. Thank you very much ~WhoMe???~ Another big thank you to you SHERRI GIBSON for the great idea in creating this wonderful group here at WDC. Thank you very much!

It's my pleasure to spare some of my times to give some reviews to this group page. Before I carry on, I will just quick introduce me. I am Metu the fisherman from Kiribati in the Central Pacific. I love music at home and reviewing and reading here at WDC. Back to the points! Well I think all the information here are very significant especially to members of the group and as well as non members in fact that the information will guide them through in their works especially for the group. I like how the information written. It clear because the fonts and colors used are very much fabulous. The group banner also plays a role in decorating the page in a lovely way. Nice job! What I liked most in joining the group is the group goal which is ‘To offer HONEST reviews to newbies, whether they have been at WDC for a minute or longer. All reviewers are expected to be honest, and give the writers constructive criticism if needed in a tasteful way.’ Sound positive and inspiring to me. *Smile* As a proud new member I will follow all the commands from leaders. I am happy to be part of this group.

I will be here until my fingertips can't write anymore. Good luck to leaders and group members from registered users, authors, preferred authors, moderators and senior moderators and all who are part of this lovely and caring group. Stay blessed Yay!

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Writing is a habit but thanks to those who take time to get the work done. It's a hard job to pass the ideas from the mind and out to the papers. They are meant so much to the story world; I should probably honor them in their hardworking profession. They are the greatest writers of all times. ~M.T.Metutera

*UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO*


If you are viewing my review, please visit my port to give me a review or two. I'm willing to see your reviews so that I can tell whether my pieces are good or need an improvement.

*MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB*

To end my work I will say congratulation to you with your writing. I wish your paper will go smooth and your pen will never lose ink until you meet your writing goals, so please keep on reading, writing and learning. Wherever you are, good luck and be blessed all the way you go!

*BigSmile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *BigSmile*

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
THIS REVIEW BROUGHT TO YOU BY BREAKER ON BEHALF OF THE "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


This is a special review to honor your WDC Account Anniversary.

Hello Ԝ€ß☆ԜiʈCH ! Are you a witch? By the way I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your port item "Instincts of My Inner Animal" . Remember that my review is just my personal point of view. You may disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

*ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
It’s my pleasure to offer you a review for the first time in honor your WDC Account Birthday. Congratulation! Between that you are the first moderator and the second member of the community to receive my first review in affiliation with my new group "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP"  *Smile* You are lucky but I am too because I think I’m the first newbie to jump to your port to review your item that no one have ever reviewed it. Please don’t thank me because I love to review.*Laugh* I read your poetry before I come up with my comment and I found that your writing is awesome! Now I can tell that your guider or mentor is a wolf and I tell that from the last part of your poetry that said ‘I thank the Great Spirit who gave me the wolf as a guide.’ Impressive!

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
The pace is good. It flows well from the start to the last part. Words are played well and that makes it exclusive. The choice of words is appropriate to support your content.

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
I mostly liked the first stanza. It took my attention very much. *Smile*

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
I try to search for any writing gems there but good that I don’t notice any here proving that your piece is awesome!

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
I suggest you to proofread the last stanza. I think the word ‘guide’ should be guider, Am I right? Please forgive me if I’m wrong. All my comments are just my thought. Please keep on sharing this must-read poetry. I am inspired to read it and undoubtedly other members will feel the same. *Smile*

*Bird* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Bird*
Overall your piece is inspiring and I like it especially the rhyme part. I have a rhyme poem about corruption and you can see here if you are interested "Corruption (Leadership Behind the Scene)" . I’m a rap fan and I love fast pace poetry builds in rhyme. I'll be back to review your other pieces some other times. Good luck!

*Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw*


Thank you very much for your time to write this inspiring work. Keep your pen inked and write on!

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Writing is a habit but thanks to those who take time to get the work done. It's a hard job to pass the ideas from the mind and out to the papers. They are meant so much to the story world; I should probably honor them in their hardworking profession. They are the greatest writers of all times. ~M.T.Metutera

*UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO*


If you are viewing my review, please visit my port to give me a review or two. I'm willing to see your reviews so that I can tell whether my pieces are good or need an improvement.

*MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB*

To end my work I will say congratulation to you with your writing. I wish your paper will go smooth and your pen will never lose ink until you meet your writing goals, so please keep on reading, writing and learning. Wherever you are, good luck and be blessed all the way you go!

*BigSmile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *BigSmile*

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Review of The Guitar  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
THIS REVIEW BROUGHT TO YOU BY BREAKER ON BEHALF OF THE "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" 

*Candleb*HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *Candlev*


This is a special review to honor your WDC Account Anniversary.

Hello Kay Lim ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your port item "The Guitar" . Remember that my review is just my personal point of view. You may disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

*ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV* *ButterflyV*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
Hey I have a good news for you. You know what? You are the first I reviewed yours and affiliate my review with my new group "SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP" . Happy WDC Account Birthday, Congratulation! Well I try to figure out your piece and I found that the content is already hit me in the face lol. You writing is very clear and concise to me as a reader. Is this a single stanza poetry? By reading this piece and I can tell that you are a guitar player or even a singer. You wrote this piece to express your feeling about guitar. That's interesting! *Smile*

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
I read your poetry from the start to the end not once but twice and I see that the pace is good. It flows well . Words are played well and that makes it unique to me. The choice of words is appropriate to support your content. Good job!

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
Line 10 ‘>>>'The guitar that stands at the edge of the bed' and also the last line>>> ‘Is no longer a guitar for me anymore.’ Sound sad to me because I love to play it.*Sad*

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
I don’t notice any errors in your writing. Keep up the good work!

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
I suggest you to keep on sharing this wonderful poetry. I am inspired to read yours and I'm sure that other members will do the same.

*Bird* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Bird*
You piece is wonderful and favorable. I like it so much. *Smile*

*Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw* *Paw*


Thank you very much for your time to write this inspiring work. Keep your pen inked and write on!

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Writing is a habit but thanks to those who take time to get the work done. It’s a hard job to pass the ideas from the mind and out to the papers. They are meant so much to the story world; I should probably honor them in their hardworking profession. They are the greatest writers of all times. ~M.T.Metutera

*UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO* *UmbrellaO*


If you are viewing my review, please visit my port to give me a review or two. I'm willing to see your reviews so that I can tell whether my pieces are good or need an improvement.

*MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB* *MushroomB*

To end my work I will say congratulation to you with your writing. I wish your paper will go smooth and your pen will never lose ink until you meet your writing goals, so please keep on reading, writing and learning. Wherever you are, good luck and be blessed all the way you go!

*BigSmile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *Smile* *BigSmile*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A PDG NEWBIE REVIEW

Hello F. Garcia ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews for your item. This is a review for the "Paper Dolls Group" . Please remember, a review is only how I, as an individual, see your piece. Accept what you agree with, ignore that which you disagree with.

*Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
I read your wonderful poetry and I can tell that it's my pleasure to read and write you are review. I'm a rap fan and I like how poetry wrote in free verse builds in rhyme. This piece is one of them. At first sight, I thought it's about chocolate or something sweet because I honestly have never heard about BOHOL but as I go through it in doing some researches, and I see that you talk about the Famous Hills of BOHOL in the Philippines. Interesting!

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
The piece flows well and at a fast pace. It’s more like a song.” As it stands the sentence makes little sense.

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
'peoples around the world GO inTO motion and BOHOL is their destination.' This is my favorite part. Well done!

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
I think I have no idea in pointing errors regarding punctuations in fact that it's well set. Anyway there a only a few words that bother me while reading and you can see them below.
The word 'peoples' should be should be singular 'people'. I also come across the word you used in line 3 of the second stanza which is ‘satiating’. I don't think that is the appropriate word to use but I'm sure that you meant to use the word ‘satiated’ meaning: feel to satisfaction. The last one is the word ‘extoll’. I'm not sure what is the meaning of that word but I'm sure you meant ‘extol’ meaning: Praise, glorify, or honour. I used the wordweb dictionary to check on words and spellings.

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
You need to proofread the poem before posting. You typed 'inTO' which should be 'into' This is just a thought.

*Bird* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Bird*
I am impressed with this piece and I’m sure I’ll be back to read it again. *Smile*

*Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis*


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!
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What you do is what you learn; what goes wrong will finally go right. ~M.T.Metutera


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Review of Mind Right Now ..  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A REVIEW FROM BREAKER ON BEHALF OF THE "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 

Hello Poetry Scribble ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews
for your item "Mind Right Now .." . Please keep in mind that my review is solely my opinion. You may accept what you agree with and ignore what you disagree with.

*Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang* *Yinyang*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
It's my pleasure to welcome you to WDC with my review of your item. This piece was written in 3 stanzas with 8 lines each. It looked very neat. Nice job!

*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
The flow of this piece is slack maybe you could fix this but that up to you.

*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
I liked the metaphor in the third stanza 'Like a pair of shoes; new or old One foot follows another.' I think that's great.

*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
You need to pay attention to the punctuations here and I think the punctuations also have a connection with the slow pace of your piece.

*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
I suggest you to re-craft this interesting piece because the choice of word could support the good flow. The punctuation also need a lot of considerations. I see that there are some articles you missed too. Review this yourself and I'm sure you will see some few errors. Proofreading is a good way to do that. I noticed that this is maybe your first or second pieces. Don't worry to much about the errors cause you have plenty of times to fix them. I may back to your port to read this piece when you have done with changes that might take place in the future.

*Bird* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Bird*
I liked the idea in this piece but if you could spare some times to make it clear and concise, I'm sure it will be a good read.

*NoteW* *NoteW* *NoteW* *NoteW* *NoteW* *NoteW*


Thanks for sharing your inspiring work, write on!
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What you do is what you learn; what goes wrong will finally go right.~M.T.Metutera

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Rated: E | (4.0)
A PDG NEWBIE REVIEW

Hello F. Garcia ! I'm Breaker~A Vigilante Ranger~ and I will be giving you some of the reviews
for your item. This is a review for the "Paper Dolls Group" . Please remember, a review is
only how I, as an individual, see your piece. Accept what you agree with, ignore that
which you disagree with.


*Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff**Sheriff*


*Idea* OVERVIEW *Idea*
I read your wonderful poetry and I can tell that it's my pleasure to read you in this piece. I'm a rap fan and I like how poetry wrote in free verse build in rhyme. This piece is one of it. Anyway at first sight, I thought it's about chocolate or something sweet because I honestly have never heard about BOHOL but as I go through it in doing some researches, and I see that you refer CHOCOLATE to the Famous Chocolate Hills of BOHOL in the Philippines. Interesting! This piece is written in four lines in each stanzas which is short.


*Boat* FLOW *Boat*
This piece is flowing well in a fast pace. It's more like a song and that support this piece awesome to me.


*ThumbsUp* FAVORITE LINES *ThumbsUp*
peoples around the world GO inTO motion
and BOHOL is their destination. This is my favorite part. Well done!


*Magnify* GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION *Magnify*
I think I have no idea in pointing errors regarding punctuations in fact that it's well set. Anyway there a only a few words that bothering me while reading and you can see them below *Down*
the wold peoples should be people. I also come across the word you used in line 3 of the second stanzas which is satiating. I don't think that is the appropriate word to use but I'm sure that you meant to use the word satiated meaning: feel to satisfaction. The last one is the word extoll. I'm not sure what is the meaning of that word but I'm sure you meant extol meaning: Praise, glorify, or honour. I used the wordweb dictionary to check on words and spellings.


*Key* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENTS *Key*
You should typed the letter properly not to confuse the reader. You can see how you spell the word inTO it should be typed into. This is just a thought.

*Bird* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Bird*
I may not stop reading this piece because I like it so much. Your impression is favorable. *Smile*


*Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis* *Fleurdelis*


Thank you very much for sharing your inspiring work!


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What you do is what you learn; what goes wrong will finally go right. ~M.T.Metutera


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, ruwth! I am here at your port trying to review your item entitled "My Favorite Bible Verse . . ." . I'm not an expert reviewer but I will try my best to provide some useful reviews for you with an idea that is to help you in improving your work.

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it if you see fit. Remember! It just my suggestions.

The original passage from the bible that inspired you to write this worksheet is very touchable. What a wonderful woman are you? Am I wrong in saying that? Well, I may say that I'm lucky to be a member of WdC by chance, if not I wouldn't have a chance to read this truly written piece from the heart. I am so glad to get in your port today because my eyes wide open and that I could consider what you are trying to convey to the reader in this piece. I am bless today. Please allow me to copy and paste your writing so that other members who will see my review could have a chance to read it indeed. I like every parts of it and that actually my reason of wanting to paste it here with my review.


ruwth's favorite Bible passage

I John 1:9

If we confess our sins, He is faithful and just to forgive us and to cleanse us from all unrighteousness.

This verse reveals a powerful life-changing tool. What I have learned over the years is that if there is anything in my life that I am doing outside God's will for me, if I will confess it as sin, He will CHANGE ME in that area.

I don't even have to WANT to be changed in an area -- I have confessed as sin, "God, I am doing such and such -- and I do not even want to stop -- and I confess NOT WANTING to stop AS SIN and look to you to forgive me and cleanse me of ALL unrighteousness." AND HE DOES -- inevitably, my attitude will change and I will soon be confessing that very thing to Him that I had previously not been willing to change -- because He has made me WANT to change it.

A workshop/worksheet that I have developed is based on this verse and "If we confess our sins one to another, we shall be healed!"

It works!

After reading this wonderful writing many times, I try to scan for errors if any but good nothing detected. It's written well in a sequence. Overall, your work is inspiring and awesome*Exclaim*

Thank you very much for sharing it with us, members of WdC.

God bless you always, ruwth.

*ThumbsUp* luck and Write On *Exclaim*

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Hello, Steven! I am here at the WdC ReviewMe List trying to review your story entitled "draft of Broken World..." . I'm not an expert reviewer but I will try my best to provide some useful reviews for you with an idea that is to help you in improving your work.

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it if you see fit. It just my suggestions.

I see that your opening is very interesting to me as a reader in fact that you take the attention of the reader with the dialogue in the first paragraph. I try to figure out the manner of your characters and I can tell they are tough in attitude. The setting of the scene is kind of dangerous and that makes me nervous while reading this story. Your story is great and I know that there are more to come out soon for public reviewing. I can't wait!

Even though I enjoy in reading your story but something bothering me and that you can see them below but it up to you for consideration.

I think the problem in the first and second paragraph is the em/en Dash and capitalization in starting the new sentence. You should follow the writing rules well so that you don't confuse the reader. It's better if you place the dash properly and letters that suppose to be in uppercase. Below you can see the original texts in bold black and the demonstration in blue font.

As he fled down the hall towards his exit, the young man- no older than his late twenties- turned the corner to a packed lobby. “s***!” he thought aloud.

“What's wro-”

As he fled down the hall towards his exit, the young man—no older than his late twenties—turned the corner to a packed lobby. “s***!” He thought aloud.

“What's wro—”

In the paragraph below the problem is the word cops'll. It would be better if you separate these 2 words cops and will for better read.

“Dammit Eli, you sneaky bastard... you'd make a ghost nervous! We gotta run man, cops'll be here any minute now.” Eli turned back towards the opposite side of the building, as Roland snatched up his black duffel bag, and trotted along behind trying to catch up.

“Dammit Eli, you sneaky bastard... you'd make a ghost nervous! We gotta run man, cops will be here any minute now.” Eli turned back towards the opposite side of the building, as Roland snatched up his black duffel bag, and trotted along behind trying to catch up.

I suggest you to consider the word onto. because you should avoid redundant expressions in your writing when possible in fact that it has extra words that add no new meaning to the phrase and by eliminating that you will make your writing more clear and concise to the reader.

You may describe your characters for readers to know them well. Don't think you the only one who should know them well. To me I should also recognize them. How tall he is? Did he brave enough to face the danger or tragedy? or did they know how to use a pistol and so on and so on. lol

You may also consider some phrases that need a good craft just to help your reader in exploring the world you created. lol

Thank you very much for sharing your wonderful and inspiring story with members of WdC.

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Hello,Sum1! I am here to review your poetry entitled "So Serene, So Still" . I'm not an expert writer but I will try my best to provide some useful reviews for you with an idea that is to help you in improving your work.

Please keep in mind that my review is primarily based on my opinion and you may ignore it, if you see fit.

This piece is inspiring just like the picture you used as a prompt. I may not want to stop reading your poetry because it's interesting. I like the way you start your writing using the words up? or down? which come along at the end. Here you take the attention of the reader by questioning them in the first line and again at last. Good job! Your writing is clear and flowing well. Anyway I have only one suggestion that I think you need to consider it just to improve this piece 100%.

I think it's better if you change the word lead to led because you may have used one word when you meant another. A common cause of the error is homophones and that happen when two words that sound alike but have different meanings and spellings. Review the definition of the word you used and the word suggested.

Thank you very much for sharing your wonderful and inspiring piece with members of WdC.

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