Wow! My senses are bombarded with alliteration, and I like that. What a pleasure to read and at the same time find writing inspiration within. As soon as I finish this review I am eager to launch on a new poetic adventure.

I've already mentioned alliteration but to elaborate: "soaring, sounds, swirling, shimmering, sparkling, and shivers," in a single meaningful sentence that forms a single stanza is delightful. Another favorite set includes: "where, wiggling, wend, words, written," or "tears, smiles, and torn, similes." I could go on, but I must point out that the feature of greatest importance is not simply a collection of alliterative words, but instead how the words are artfully placed to flow effortlessly from the page. It pleases the eye when read silently and the ear when read aloud (like a vocal symphony).

"mind's tongue, oozing texture," etc.

Captures what a poem should be. Enough said.

I have nothing to complain about or question in this review. Anyone who reads this review and has any interest in poetry should click on the link to it and read "Poetry" . Trust me, it is a most pleasant read. In conclusion I quote: "ah, but this, this is a poem."

I looked into your port to find something to review and found a dilemma--which of three of your recent poems should I review? They all contain themes to capture my imagination: one about the sea, one that dealt with rain and one concerning the moon. After reading all three I chose to review "the same moon" . The ideas that intrigued me in this poem are: reflecting light from the same object observed by at least two individuals a great distance apart, time and experience shared and laughter traveling through space. Captivating thoughts joined through poetry.

The rhythm and voice that I hear, as I read, reflects the softness of thoughts mingling with moonlight. I like the way the words flow from start to finish. It's only when I begin to analyze the thoughts as expressed through word choice and placement that I find uncertainty. I understand what is being said but in a few places it causes me to hesitate.

As I read the first sentence I got to the end word (there) and had to reverse back to the middle of the sentence to understand. I would recommend placing the word there after the word which . Then the thought follows naturally, i.e. "here, dashing . . . which, there, lays softly . . ."

I understand the indented part of the second stanza and think it works well as you move closer into the narrator's immediate thoughts. I don't think the parenthesis fits here nor does it add anything and I believe it would be better to leave it out in this case.

I assume that using the word alone twice in close proximity is for the purpose of emphasis since it is not needed. It might provide greater emphasis to repeat it in the same way, i.e. "alone in crowds, or alone in bed. . . ." However it does not bother me the way it is and of course it is your call.

At the beginning of the third stanza you reaffirm that this is the same moon as if you might be answering a question that was posed earlier, but there is no question in the way it is stated in the first stanza. I wonder if it would strengthen the poem to form the first stanza as a question by starting with "is this."

The imagery is original, powerful and vivid bringing the theme to life in the readers mind. Time, distance, aloneness, laughter and light are brought together and we find comfort in the mutually sharing of these ideas.

This is a superb poem as is. The idea, imagery, voice and quiet emotion are splendid. I believe it could be so much more through a few minor adjustments. Review word choice and order, line beaks and how it affects the importance of the words, and check for clarity and continuity of thought. A masterpiece in the making, keep up the good work.

If you hadn't told me I would not have known that this was a first attempt. It has a quality that makes me want to read it over many times.

Some poems are served by a consistent Rhyme and meter. I like the way you combine consistency within each stanza and introduce variation from one to another. There are a few tiny inconsistencies in places that are quite easy to adjust if you wish: for example the flow of line 4 causes me to pause. I would try changing the beat through the number of syllables or perhaps by replacing "the" with a type of tide (e.g. flood, ebb, spring, etc.). Specificity is usually not a bad thing. Also, in line 22 I would consider changing "and the" to either one or the other, not both.

Excellent use of words that form pictures in my mind. Perhaps there is a hint of how it all comes together in the last stanza. I find comfort in "To those we hearken - whose hearts never darken. Thinking of the title, "The Start of Something?" I puzzle the question. The last line leaves me wondering, to the end of what? Maybe "To the end of time.

This is an excellent first poem, or to bring it into better perspective, it would be a fine one-hundredth poem. I look forward to reading your future poems.

Jellyfish, I like your style. This poetic story has humor, conflict and resolution. It brings a smile that lasts a Cretan mile. (or should I say kilometer)
The title tells me that it happened in Crete, but the body of the poem doesn't mention it. I'm left to wonder, why is that important? Overall a fine poem, that with a little tightening would be even better.

The rhyme in the second and fourth line of each stanza varies from perfect (sleeping-creeping) to general (world-girl). The rhyme does not add or take away from the overall enjoyment of the poem.

Tends to be slightly irregular, but when read out loud and the pauses are placed where they would normally fall, it has a pleasant and appropriate flow.

You paint a picture that I can readily relate to. My experience with the little buggers allow me to feel strong empathy.

Excellent and fitting to create a pleasurable read.

I've read a lot of poetry in recent days, but none that I enjoyed more than this. I would like to read the companion poem from the mosquito's point of view.