Great read! I can relate to this story! Thanks for sharing. The picture of the dog is just an added plus! I would enjoy reading more stories from this author.
I like the idea of the story. I realize that this is only a rough draft, so the punctuation and grammar errors will be fixed later--there is a lot of them. I did not read the intro and still, I was able to see where the author was going with the story. Interesting! I hope to read Chapter 2 soon! Good luck!
What a dream! I'm reminded of a video game my son plays. I wonder if this is what it would be like to live in the video game? How interesting! I hate it ended! You could make a novel out of this!! Great story, thank you for sharing!!
Thank you for sharing your work. I enjoyed the chapter. Though a bit different, I am reminded of Twilight. I think you have a great idea here and hope to read more soon.
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