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Review of I: Wraith  
Review by Emerson Riley
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
My Thoughts

Superb! This is a fantastic beginning to a story. I've yet to read chapter one but I will.



My Favorite

My favorite part was the use of rich detail in describing the surroundings and the showing of the characters emotions



Suggestions

I have but one suggestion. In the second to last paragraph where Ghadrik uses the word honey. I would like to see that taken out because I feel it doesn't fit his character.



Synopsis

Over all this piece is flawless. I'm excited to read it. It shows there is promising talent out there. Keep writing it, I want to see it on a shelf in the bookstore.



Take my thoughts as you will for I give them freely, and remember that they are only my thoughts.
Your mind is a notebook, the world is a pen. Never stop writing.
"No passion in the world is equal to the passion to alter someone else's draft."
-H.G. Wells


-e.r.
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