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Review of Selkie  
Review by Ency Peterson
Rated: E | (4.5)
For a short story, it works. Honestly, I enjoyed reading it and it didn't need to take a huge amount of time, but the lack of space between paragraphs and then a sudden double space is slightly annoying. If you ever wanted to expand on the story, or write up prequels and sequels, you have plenty of room to do so. Things like how the man managed to get the woman's pelt, and possible adventures at school with the occasional other child for the little boy are great prequel ideas. As for expanding on this, the adventure to get back to the ocean probably had a few more problems than just hiding from the man, and there are definitely areas that it felt you held back just a bit in what you were describing. Then for sequel material, there's how they settled back into life in the ocean. Did the little boy or his mom miss anyone from when they lived on land? Friends that they had made; teachers that wondered about them?

Just a few thoughts, but overall, I did enjoy the story!
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Review of Ludia's Shortcut  
Review by Ency Peterson
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
It definitely felt like a youngster wrote it which when seeing that Ludia is only seven makes sense. It's engaging, but I felt that there was something missing. Perhaps a bit from the vampire's point of view after Ludia's story or something from after Ludia reached the party. I didn't really get how this was a shortcut either. Also, why did Ludia's mother tell her to never take the road? Was it because of the vampire or something even more sinister? It was an intriguing read, though.
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