If you live in a place like, say, somewhere in the bible belt, then it may be best to keep all to yourself, but to tell your trustworthy friends and potential partners. I don't say this because you should be ashamed of who you are, but simply because keeping it only amungst trusted ones will keep you from being horribly discriminated against and so on. I live within the bible belt and it's not the best situation for homo/bi/transexuals.
Now if you live outside the bible belt, like say a large city up north, then go ahead show as much emotion as you like, the way it should be! Usually larger cities don't care if you're a different sexuallity, since there are so many different kinds of people all ready.
Basically, it all depends on how hostile people will be, and your safety. Some places just aren't safe to spill out all your emotions. Sorry for writing an opinion that probably isn't necissary, but I thought I might as well. :)
Well yes and no. Since marriage is originally a religious thing, then I believe churches have a right to say that they're not going to marry them off.
However, that doesn't mean that the gay/lesbian couple shouldn't be deprived of the benifits of civil union. They should be able to at least have the same benefits from the government that a straight married couple has. I probably didn't need to give my full opinion, but I thought I might as well.
A very nice read, this is. I like the fact that you made the story up of diary entries. It only makes sense that a chronicler would be needed, and you took advantage of that. The pace of the story was pretty good considering that these are journal entries were're reading and not a narrated experience.
One thing that I noticed was that while the main character remained flat and static, the others were showing signs of extreme destress. It doesn't nessessarily hurt the story, but it may make the reader wonder why the chronicler doesn't seem to be experiencing any distress from the situation. Then again, the reader may be so obsorbed in what the chronicler is writting about that they don't even notice.
Another thing I noticed was the diologue of the chronicler. To me she didn't seem like a teenager, rather simply something that was writing down everything that happened around her. There wasn't any slang (and no, I don't mean that I expect profanity of any kind. Just little slang-ish phrases or words, such as saying "like" where it doesn't belong sometimes lol), but then again the chronicler may just be more mature then her age. My point is that there was no real indication of their ages in the text except when it was specifically said.
Gramatically speaking, I didn't spot any real gramatical errors. You kept in third person, didn't make any sentence longer then it needed.
All-in-all, it was a pretty good ending. I especially loved the epilogue, good comic relief. Interresting how everyone became famous... except for the scumbag, Nick, lol.
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