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Review of Invinsible  
Review by ethan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Just thought I'd mention the hopefully, typo error, in the title....'invinsible' rather than invisible or perhaps, invincible.
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Review of Boxes  
Review by ethan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Nicely done.

Word play - fantastic.

Metaphors - adequate, quite.

In all, a very good one. Didn't stop till i ran through it.

(“You’re client,” retorted Flanders angrily, “is the lead suspect in an investigation. He’s not going anywhere.” your and not 'you're). sure it was a typo though.

Well done, and write on!

Ethan
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Review of The Epitaph  
Review by ethan
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
great story, riveting plot, good development...

..however, i found s few misapplied tenses: "They usually come (came) alone to the prey's lair and mauled it." (i think the train of tenses in that paragraph should have been followed here as well); and, "especially in the silence of the forest where even the smallest of sounds get (got) magnified many times (same as previous).

the above regardless, compelling story.

i shall look forward to the rest of it.

regards,

Ethan.
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