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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Positive:
-Interesting plot, it kept me reading.
- I like the fact that there are three different plots, that I'm assuming will eventually come together.

Negative:
- In my opinion, some scenes were a little unrealistic when it comes to the characters thoughts and the amount of detail. For example, After the knives fell on Layla, she would probably be in immense pain, and in her mind she would be thinking about how the pain felt. After all, she is only a teenager, not a soilder trained to ignore pain (as far as I know).

Overall I really like the story, and am interested in what happens next.
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