This is a very nice poem. I especially like the last verse. It was very touching. There are a couple instances where i think some wording could be changed. Line 4: instead of In the morning, I feel very disgraced. How about: In the morning, I feel dismissed. Line 10: instead of In a December cold breeze. How about: In December's cold breeze. Overall, good poem.
I would like to comment on your poem. I love things that make me feel and when I finished your poem, I felt a rush of emotion spread throughout my body. I don't know anyone with a child that has autism, but I do have a cousin with a different outlook on life (just a better way to say it). The love is still there for her always. I commend you on your use of words. My favorite line : A place we cannot go, he cannot leave.
Excellent. I am a big fan of horror, and your poem makes my skin crawl. So that is a good response. The way that you use your words in this poem created a image for me to see everything that you conveyed. The title is what struck me the most, I was scrolling dowm the page and I just had to see what it was about. Great use of words.
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