I'M SORRY BUT I COULDNT EVEN READ THIS. THERE ARE NO SEPERATIONS BETWEEN SENTANCES. A TON OF GRAMATICAL ERRORS AND I FELT AS THOUGH i WAS ON SPEED TIME. i WOULD LOVE TO READ THE STORY, BUT IT NEEDS ALOT OF WORK AND CORRECTING.
WOW! A LITTLE SLOW IN THE BEGINNING BUT, A VERY POWERFULL STORY. i ESPECIALLY LIKE THE TWIST AT THE END WHERE THE YOUNGEST INNOCENT CHILT OUTSMARTED HIS FATHER WITHOUT EVEN KNOWING IT. BRAVO! THIS IS PROBABLY THE BEST STORY IVE READ ON THIS SITE SO FAR. I LOVE HOW YOU TAKE US INSIDE THE MIOND OF THE MAI CHARACTER SO WE CAN UNDERSTAND EVERY ASPECT OF HIM. KEEP ON WRITTING. THERE WERE A FEW POINT OF VIEW MISTAKES BUT OTHER THEN THAT THIS STORY ROCKS!
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