This was really nice! I liked the vivid imagery and sense of movement as the violent storm rolls in, followed by the calm afterwards. Very visual - my kind of writing. I also liked that you used some slightly unusual words, such as "roiling" and "claxon." It helps to have a large palette of words you can use to create poetic imagery.
I really liked your essay (I assume they gave you a good grade for it). I saw the films some years ago and was quite impressed with them myself. Of the three, I think "Bleu" made the biggest impression on me (and helped to secure the crush I had on Juliet Binoche at the time). I still sometimes think of the image of the blueish/purplish foil candy wrapper that Julie's daughter plays with in the film. I'm not sure why, but, for me, that was just one of those images that stays with you.
I liked the structure of this poem - how the descriptions of fall's pleasant aspects are placed in between the repeated word "autumn" and the constant reminder "winter is coming" (which inevitably becomes "winter is here" at the end). For me, the poem reflects the melancholy aspect of autumn - it's a very beautiful season, but underneath the awareness of its appealing characteristics is the knowledge that it won't last, and there is a darker, harsher season lying in wait. The poem does a good job of illustrating the fleeting nature of the period between summer and winter.
I thought this was really good. The images of vague grayness and indeterminate spaces effectively illustrated the sense of rootlessness and uncertainty the narrator feels. Also, the image of the waves was very apt - they rise and fall in a more or less rhythmic pattern, but arise from an "unfathomably deep space" that seems difficult or impossible to know/understand. I thought he piece was an unflinching look at the sense of randomness, chaos, and uncertainty that can at times seem overwhelming when one "looks into the void."
I thought the pacing of this story was really good. The writing really carries the reader along and keeps him/her engaged. The sentences are efficient and flow nicely into each other. You provide enough description to create a clear sense of the action and setting, but not so much that it bogs down the pace.
I thought the sensory descriptions in this story were great. The story really recreated the feeling of another era. I thought the descriptions of the unusual layout of the house and the heating system were especially interesting. This sentence: "I loved to get dressed in the early morning standing over a floor register with that hot air blowing on me" reminded me of winter mornings when I was a kid and used to get up early, but would sometimes fall asleep again lying by the heating vent (sort of like a cat, I suppose).
One paragraph that kind of puzzled me was this one: "Dad probably knew someone with a plow on his truck who could help us out. Money was tight then, but labor was cheap! Like any young boy who wanted to be playing in the snow instead of working, I complained. Deaf ears were the order of business, though." I wasn't sure if you meant that your father knew someone who could have plowed the driveway instead of the family doing it, or if you meant something else. Also, the sentence "Deaf ears were the order of business, though" seemed like it could have been a little clearer. Overall, though, I really enjoyed the story. Thanks!
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