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Overall Impressions:
What a heart-warming story. I really enjoyed reading this.
Plot Comments:
This had a good plot and was well written.
Emotional Impact:
In life it isn't about what you don't have, it's about what you do have. In this case, they had the most important gift in the world....a loving family.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this sweet story with me. Keep writing!
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This is a very sweet piece that you've written. I love the lovely array of colors that you used to write this. This was well written, although the structure is a little shakey, the message comes across in this piece. I found one misspelled word; in line 20, "apon" should be "upon". Other than that, well done!
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What a great fact of history! I really enjoyed reading this! This was very educational and fun to read. I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors. This was well written and well-put together. Thank you for sharing this with me!
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This was very tearful and beautiful. I really enjoyed reading this!
Emotional Impact:
I can feel what you must have felt. I could feel the pain and the agony that this person was going through.
Flow:
I think that the flow in this needs just a little work. I would remove "Boy, please" it will sound a lot better and make the poem flow better. It's just a suggestion, you don't need to change it if you don't want too.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done!
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Overall Impressions:
Some people have a hard time forgiving. Some don't have the capacity to forgive. I can feel the anguish in this piece. You write very emotional poetry.
Flow:
This had excellent flow and was well written.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done! Keep writing!
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Overall Impressions:
This is another sad but great poem. Again, I totally understand. Getting over someone is very difficult, especially if you've been with them for a long time.
Emotional Impact:
I hope that you are able to get over your heartache and grief one day.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words, however, I have found one grammar issue;
In the fourth stanza, 'to' should be changed to 'too'.
Other than that, you did an excellent job in this area.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you again! Well done!
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Overall Impressions:
First of all I want to say that this is a great start to a story! You are doing an excellent job so far! I hope that you will continue on with this.
Plot Comments:
You have a strong plot going full of action and adventure.
Character Comments:
I love the names that you've chosen for the characters, and I really love their personalities.
Imagery:
You gave great detail and imagery in this.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing such a great story with me! Keep writing!
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Overall Impressions:
This is definately a poem that I can relate to. I have recently gone through a heart-wrenching break up. It's never fun and it hurts.
Emotional Impact:
Like I said, I can definately relate to all of this. It's always sad when someone has to suffer through something like this.
Flow:
This had great flow and was well-written!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done! Keep writing!
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Overall Impressions:
This is a great poem! I have never seen one written like this.....very unique!
Emotional Impact:
I can definately relate to this poem. I feel as though I don't have time to enjoy the great things in life either. Never seems to be enough time.
Flow:
This had great flow and form.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Closing Remarks:
Well done! I really enjoyed this!
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Overall Impressions:
I really love Haiku, it's one of my favorite forms to read and review! I have never written any in this form myself, but I would like to try someday!
Imagery:
You did a really great job with the different colors and descriptions.
Flow/Form:
You followed the Haiku form perfectly, and had excellent flow.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors!
Closing Remarks:
Well done! I had a pleasant timd scanning through your port!
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Overall Impressions: I don't think that I could ever learn how to golf, lol! My grandfather and my dad used to play golf on Sundays. I would probably miss hitting the ball with every stroke. This was a cute story and I really enjoyed reading this.
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This is so cute, lol! In some ways I am considered a hermit too. My dad says that I am a home-body. He doesn't see that as a problem, but Jerry did. I can understand why someone would rather stay in the comfort of their own homes. Nothing wrong with that! Thanks for the short but amusing read!
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I enjoyed reading this. This was well written with a lot of emotion.
I know exactly how you feel. You couldn't have written this more perfectly.
I don't think that I could ever learn how to golf, lol! My grandfather and my dad used to play golf on Sundays. I would probably miss hitting the ball with every stroke. This was a cute story and I really enjoyed reading this. 
Thanks for the short but amusing read!