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Review of The Immortal Kiss  
Review by Gerard Muller
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Thank you for reading and rating by piece entitled "Cold and Indifferent Love". Your comments were most encouraging.

Now,regarding your writing...

I found this story well-written and reminiscent of Anne Rice's style. Pose and description ran quite smoothly and made for a cohesive tale. There was, however, one teeny-tiny word out of place. Perhaps you intended not to include "as" in the sentence below...

"He captured her gently within his hand, (as) and let his middle finger ease slowly up her wetness."

By the way, good sentence.
As a whole, I thought this piece charming.
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