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Review of Hidden Knowledge  
Review by *Jaks*
Rated: E | (2.5)
This is a great story. You kind of rush it though. It gets to the climax and ending way too quickly. After you come to the point of Emma telling Emilys mom what was going on you need to go more in depth making the ending more understandable. You see that she goes to the police and that she starts to live with Emily and her family, but it seems like just a drop off. It doesn't seem like that should be the ending. It also has some gramatical errors and other little problems like that. When you have dialog between the characters you dont say who is doing the talking enough and it takes a couple times of reading through it to understand who is talking. Another small thing is the main characters names are too similar causeing conflict in reading it. Please do not be discouraged or upset. I really like it, I am just a bit overly critical I think.
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