That was a very good piece T.L. Not so much for the Rhyme scheme, but not all poems have to rhyme. It was a steadily paced piece and I enjoyed the flow of it. You transitions were somewhat firm, but they didn't interrupt the flow too much.
"Everything in life seems to have a toll,
paying too much with myself to blame."
I especially like those two lines. Very interesting way to describe your feelings.
Keep up the good work. Maybe I'll seeya in the Scroll.
I like the way you built that...very powerful, outside of a few spelling errors..Thats a very powerful piece of work there. Keep it up. Try re-reading your work a few times to ensure it's "perfect". I tend to read mine a lot...even out of boredom, when I catch a mistake, I fix it. Very good though.
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