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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, Noyoki, Summer Wind, here reviewing your work, to thank you for reviewing mine. My reviews are not technical but more like a movie review.

 A Summer To Remember  (13+)
Jess goes too far
#1918063 by Noyoki
My first impression of your short story is the first two paragraphs pull the reader in and you want to know

what Jess means when he says don't look down. The story introduces the reader to a little boy named Jess who is a

dare devil, he seems to think that he's invincible. Jess and his friend build a ramp and put it close to a ravine trying to

do tricks on it with their bikes, but when one of the boys slips and almost falls in the ravine, it scares them away. But

Jess was different he was stupidly fearless. Just one more ride is what he wanted. He got his last ride, because he

couldn't hold on and went over the ravine.

Summary: I thought the writer did an excellent job showing the defiance of Jess. She used good word imagery and you could envision her character, a little bad ass that wouldn't back down from anything. Unfortunately it cost him his life.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kali, Summer Wind here, thanking you for reviewing my work by reviewing yours. My reviews are not technical, they are from what I perceive as I read your poem.


Disconnected from you!  (E)
Getting disconnected from your loved one for no reason brings pain to your heart and soul!
#1917546 by Kalai
My first impression of your poetry is that is a tear jerker in every sense of the word. I felt such sorrow

and you made me face doubt and tribulations in my own life through your word imagery. I had visions of a dark struggle

with love in this poem, even a possible suicide entered my thoughts until I read the last two lines :

Allow me to take charge

and bring you into my hold!

Summary: I applaud your work you really were successful In writing an emotionally moving poem!
I could feel the pain as I read the struggles of the emotions of the loved ones dealing with life.
I liked the ending when the author brought a ray of sunshine with her words into a very dark circumstance.

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Review of Baby Colton  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Samara, Summer Wind here. thanking you for reviewing my work, by reviewing a piece of yours. My reviews are not technical, they are more like a movie review.

 Baby Colton  (E)
Colton Michael Palmer 05/13/12 - 01/27/13 thank you for all your smiles we love you!
#1918696 by Samara
My first impression of your poetry is how you arranged it to flow down the page. Also, your emotionally

provoking word choices that create such strong emotions of sorrow as you read the poem. I can't even imagine what it

would be like to have to deal with such a tragedy, where a family has to deal with losing a baby. Yet, through the

darkness, you prevail with faith and hope and don't give into the hopelessness that most people do. In fact the poem is

encouraging for others who are involved in facing trials themselves. You project strength and conviction for what you

believe to be true.

My favorite lines are these four:

To be like JOB and suffer still
And still stay strong and say I will
Believe in HIM and proclaim Satan a Liar
And walk out stronger from the Fire


Summary: I thought this poem to be well written and a anchor for my own trials and tribulations.
I could feel the emotion of sorrow as I read it, but I could also see the victory at the end of the poem.
Bravo, excellent writing!

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Review of Sleeping Tigers  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Jellyfish, Summer Wind here reviewing a piece of your work, to thank you for reviewing mine. My reviews are not technical but more like a movie review.

 
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Sleeping Tigers  (13+)
A poem I once wrote about somebody I loved. Naturally, the tigers woke up.
#1914458 by Jellyfish


My first impression of your poem is how you write about the storm in your soul about love and how it rages against your

mind. I found the poem to be intense and filled with a dark struggle of someone who is involved with internal conflict of

loving someone who will ultimately eat them alive emotionally. The poem is filled with uncertainty, deep, dark, and self

awareness that most people only dream of having. Unfortunately with this type of perception, comes a lack of peace in

my opinion. I concluded that from these verses:

I am trapped in fear,
The day those sleeping tigers
Shall awaken
From my garden.
The scars appear
And I will drown again.

Summary: A very intense and deep poem. If it was any deeper you have to use a shovel, to understand it.
Dark, but beautifully written with visual imagery of words like tiger's eyes. You can visualize the tigers haunting green eyes, but also the danger that lurks behind them.

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I give this a 5 for originality, creativity and the deep meaning that is portrayed.


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Review of The Old Vampires  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Magoo, Summer Wind here, thanking for you for reviewing my work, by reviewing one of your pieces of poetry. My reviews are like a movie review, not technical.

 The Old Vampires  (E)
They reminisce about the "good old nights"
#1716330 by Magoo
My first impression of your poem is the energy that you display in your rhythmic flow of your words. I felt

the words were like a song as I read your poem. I also thought that your rhyming was fantastic. Now lets

talk about the humor. I laughed so hard reading this poem, that I had tears running down my face. This

is probably the funniest poem that I have ever read, that has some dignity without being crude. You

definitely have a talent for writing humor. My favorite verse, hmm forget favorite verse they are all my

favorite verses. The vivid word imagery created a visual picture in my mind of the old vampires as I read

them.

Summary: A very unique poem that was hilarious. Also original and creative.
The word imagery was incredible, and I couldn't stop laughing at this delightful poem.
Bravo to the author for creating a humorous poem without vulgarity!

I gave this poem a big 5 for originality, creativity, and making me laugh non stop!

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Review of "S"  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello strickcuckoo, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your work I found on the review list. My review is not technical it's more like a movie review.

 "S"  (E)
a little about Spring(a little alliteration?)
#1892669 by strlcuckoo
My first impression is how difficult it would to write such a unique tongue twister poem with the flowing

words that you chose. The words create a visual picture in your mind of Spring as you read them. My favorite verse is this one:

Soon songbirds sing seductively.
Shrubs to Sequoia
Seek nesting structures silently.
Spring to Summer soon.

The words almost sound like a melodious song as you read them.

Summary: A very unique poem that glides through your mind as you read it.
Beautifully written and original !

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Christina my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your work to thank you for reviewing mine. My reviews are more like a movie review not technical.

The Earthbound Ghost   (ASR)
"You will become a broken spirit, emotionally devastated, forgetful of names, and past."
#1906345 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams


My first impression is the author introduces us to Agnes a woman who is a medium who had a nervous breakdown. She

has tried to avoid any communication with spirits for fear of the stress it causes in her life. One after noon while she is

reading a book she encounters a shadow of a woman that she believes is a ghost. She asks the spirit why she is in her

house. The spirit reveals her name as Temperance and tells Agnes she wants her to help her to crossover to the light.

The story progresses with Agnes asking Temperance a list of questions and her answering them.

Then, Agnes proceeds to set up a spiritual ritual involving candles and a large quartz and several other things to

summon the light for Temperance to crossover. Agnes is successful and the light appears and surrounds Temperance

pulling her towards it, but then another force appears pulling her away from it. The end of the story the grotesque

skeletal entity reveals itself as her aborted baby son who accuses Temperance of murder and tells her that she belongs

with him and that he will never let her go as he drags her away from the light.

Summary: This story caused me to have goosebumps as I read it!
This author as an uncanny ability to write with visual imagery that causes the reader to react emotionally.
It was so spooky it made me look over my shoulder after I read it!
Well written!

I give this a 5 for creativity and originality.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Iva Mae, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your lovely short story. My reviews are like a movie review, not technical.

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Unlikely Christmas Miracle  (E)
A woman receives a very unexpected miracle at Christmas time.
#1908430 by Iva Lilly Durham


My first impression of this story is the author introduces us to Carrie, a woman who is plagued with health problems but

still is getting ready for Christmas, going through all the decorations, remembering the family members that gave them to

her. After working on some gifts for Christmas, Carrie takes a short nap and some pain medicine. Then, she receives a

phone call from Bill one of the senior residents, chats with him and he comes over to spend time with her and eat dinner.

The story progresses to where after visiting with the residents and talking about ghosts and gremlins in the day room,

Carrie and Bill kid about pooling their money together and moving in together with a girl for him and George Clooney for

her. The end of the story Carrie rubs a sharp pain in her chest and falls asleep in her computer chair. She awakens to a

strange living room with filled with all laughter and smiling people. She recognizes her uncle Don whose been dead for

many years. Then she sees her deceased husband Tom who tells her she's passed on and welcomes her home.

Summary: I thought the story was an inspiration for those who believe in the ever after life.
The character interaction was real, as well as the dialogue believable
A truly beautiful story written with vivid visual imagery.

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Review of Pink Christmas  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Christina, my name is Summer Wind and I'm delighted to review your short story as promised.

Pink Christmas  (E)
“But that’s a secret, a secret we know and you can’t tell. Forever. Promise?"
#1906670 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
My first impression of the story is the author introduces us to a budding relationship between a woman

named Doris and a ghost named Elsie. The story begins with Doris visiting the cemetery across from her house. She

would wander through reading inscriptions of the deceased on their tombstones, imagining the lives behind each one.

At Christmas time she noticed the same visitor that would appear in the cemetery under the Oak tree. The story

progresses where she meets the visitor and learns the child's name is Elsie. She develops a relationship with Elsie while

she questions her. Doris notices she's not wearing winter clothes, but a thin little cotton dress and black shoes. The child

tells the old woman she's visiting a grave and leads Doris to her own site ,where Doris finds out Elsie is a spirit. The end

of the story, Doris promises to come to the child's grave and plant pink daisies every Christmas.


Summary: This author never ceases to amaze me of her talent as a writer.
Her words are like cotton candy in your mouth. Delightful!
Beautiful imagery and wonderful story line!!!!



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Simple Dykie my name is Summer Wind and I'm reviewing your short story I found while searching randomly for
stories to review. My review is not technical, it's more like a movie review.

Just a Walk in the Dark  (13+)
A humorous look at quite scary nightime walk by a man and his loyal dog.
#1895291 by Simple Dykie
My first impression of your story is what a gift you have taking a simple story of walking in the dark and

turning into a hilarious comedy. The first paragraph grabs the readers attention and completely captivates them to want

to read on. The author states in the first paragraph that he is a pretty tough guy and is not afraid many things. Except for

Great White Sharks, prostate exams, and his Mother-in Law’s tuna fish casserole, He states he is not a believer of

Ghosts, Aliens, or Big Foot, but then goes on to tell the reader it's scary out there when you walk in the dark.

He advises the reader if they are going for a morning walk their are certain rules they must follow such as if your walking

in the dark and hear sounds, don't yell ,"Who's there? The author warns the reader you might get an answer such as it's

death or your ex-wife, also many other humorous replies. My favorite response is this one:

“Sorry, it’s just me, Ed, the local crackhead. I was sneaking up on you with this two by four in the hopes of possibly clubbing you senseless, taking your wallet, and scoring some drugs. I guess my answering you, kind of ruins my plans, huh?"

The story ends with the author telling the reader if your dog stops to poop while walking in the dark and starts to growl and breaks free from his leash and runs with his tale between his legs, follow him and don't look back.


Summary: I really enjoyed the witty humor of this delightful well written story.
I thought the visual imagery was excellent and the story line very entertaining.
It kept me laughing through the whole story.
Keep on writing and using your amazing gift for humor.

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Review of April Storm  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello stricuckoo, I found your poem in the request review page and though I would review it. I review on the imagery and not technical aspect.

 April Storm  (E)
A short look from tornado alley
#1555147 by strlcuckoo
My first impression is the author has written a poem with amazing visual imagery that comes

alive as your read each word. I could actually see and hear the thunder in my mind's eye. My favorite verse is this

one: This verse sets the tone of a a raging storm.

Roiling as a cauldron
Vortex, twisting, spinning
Greenish 'anvil cloud'
Funnels, dipping, diving.

These descriptive words allow the reader to feel the movement of the storm.

Summary: I thought the author has written a incredible masterpiece of visual poetry!
There is so much movement in the words bringing the poem alive so you can hear and see it in your
mind. I enjoyed this piece of artistic poetry!

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Review of Broadside  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello mybreakingheart, I found your story on the review request page and thought I would review it. My reviews are more like a movie review not technical.

 Broadside  (ASR)
For every woman who 'never saw it coming' and really meant it.
#1813064 by mybreakingheart
My first impression of your story is the first paragraph completely drew me in and I wanted to find

out more. I found the way you wrote the story, telling the reader about the way we create our realities for our lives

could be the introduction to a sad romance for a television movie. The story was very well written and kept my

interest throughout the whole reading. I could feel the pain expressed losing a husband that was loved and cared

for. Also how you brought a good friend in your story for your support system.

Summary: Overall I thought the story was written with a sad romance movie quality that was intriguing.
Unfortunately the story had a sad theme that was a husband and wife separating and living apart.
I believe this is a true story for many people that are separating or divorcing every day.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Beryl Greene, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your poem I found on the review request page, My review is not technical, it's more like a movie review.

 The Past Of A Saint  (E)
This poem represents a deep, dark aspect of my life that I struggle to cope with everyday
#1902059 by Beryl Greene
My first impression of your poem is how you write about the storm in your soul and how it rages

against your life. I found the poem to be intense and filled with a dark struggle of someone who

will not submit to God, because of rationalization, instead of obedience. I could feel the anger

leap off the page as I read each line of the poem. As far as the composition of the poem, I

thought it was phenomenal. I could visualize your pain and sorrow in my mind's eye, through you

word imagery. My favorite line is this one: To you my demon master, I am no more than a slave.

That line says it all. You can't serve two masters and you have to choose one.

Summary: I could identify with this poem, by my own situation of anger and rage and indifference toward
God. I could feel the passion in each word of this driven poem and also the struggle of the author.
I thought this was an extremely well written poem with incredible imagery!

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"Save Me! 3rd Place Poem of The Day "  A poem that can relate to what you've written.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Nvellis, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your story that I found on the review request page. My reviews are not technical, they are more like a movie review.

 Conversation with an Angel  (13+)
John is grieving over death of his wife when he has a miraculous visitor.
#1898016 by nvellis


My first impression of your story is the author introduces the reader to a man named John who as

just recently buried his wife and is overwhelmed by her death and is contemplating taking his own

life. While drinking Jack Daniels in his study, he thinks about how she would have approved the

funeral arrangements and thought them to be perfect. As the night progresses, John has a divine

intervention from an angelic gift his wife gave him. He hears a sound and sees the wooden angel

come alive and move forward on the shelf. He thinks he's drunk or hallucinating, but when the

angel begins to talk to him, he recognizes his wife's voice. He tells her how he wants to be with her

and she tells him it's not his time that he must complete some things that are left undone. In the

morning he awakes to find the angel on his desk and wonders how she got there. The author ends

the story, with John standing to his feet and the gun that he planned to take his life with falling to

the floor and him having a new desire to find the things he needs to do.

Summary: I thought this story could apply to many husbands or wives that lose their loved ones in death and are
overwhelmed by the loss and want to take their lives.
I thought the story was well written, I loved the imagery of the angel and the tenderness of the story
how a supernatural intervention could ward off a potential suicide.
Quite a creative and visual story and I enjoyed reading it.

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Christina, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your story

The Old Holy Cemetery   (ASR)
“Why am I here? This whole place is a tomb.” (RISING STAR SHINING BRIGHTER WINNER)
#1895332 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
My first impression of this incredible story is the visual imagery of the author's writing.

The author takes the reader on the inside view of spirtual newbie mediums making their first offering in a

cemetery. The spirtitual father reminds them of how they must present their offerings with respect and admiration.

The offerings must follow step by step the procedures that spiritual father has instructed. He warns them not to

have negative thoughts in their minds. He tells them that he will ask Mr. 7 Crossroads permission to enter his

domain, by opening a cachac a bottle and lighting a cigar. Then the newbies will gather their offering bags and

find a tombstone and place their offerings in honor the Spiritual Head Master and return in exactly one hour. The

story focuses on one young woman, Rosa Madelena, who years to be a powerful medium. She envisions dance

rituals and Satan's image, along with red and black candle lights. She wants to be a Fire and Knife Medium, so

she can be respected by her peers. She finds a tombstone and makes her offering summoning up Chief Seven

Keys and Esmeralda of the Night and Satan himself appears. She hears the chacha being poured and apples

being eaten, along with the cigar smoke going up in the air. A skeletal finger reaches out and touches her on the

forehead, sending her in to a tizzy. She gets up and turns around running as fast as she can terrified swearing

she would never do this again. The end of the story she returns to her group seemingly more experienced and

changed forever, and her spiritual father knowing she was transformed. Rosa returns to her condominum and

notices a light on when she knows that she left no light on. As soon as she opens the door Satan himself is

standing in the living room dressed in his black and red cape, holding his black fork, sipping on moonshine. He

takes her chin and his twisted hand and whispers “Salve!”

Summary: If this story was written for a show and tell contest. I believe the author would win hands down.
The story is written with so much color and descriptive imagery. You can see the devil and the young
girl in your mind. I thought the author wrote a suspenseful and chilling story.
The characters come alive, and that's what writing is about. My hat is off to the author Christina,
another electrifying piece of work.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Christina, I' m delighted to review your short story.

The Message (3rd. Twisted Tales)  (13+)
“I want you to understand the magnetism of a message coming from the spiritual world."
#1883530 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
I have reviewed many incredible stories of this author's portfolio, but this time I think she has out

done herself. The author writes a story about a woman receiving a reading from a medium, but this story has a

twist. Usually when people go to a medium they want to receive a message from their departed ones , but this

woman came with a different purpose, to deliver a message to her departed husband. The story shows a

man named Adar a skilled medium who tries desperately to get the woman named Elizabeth to listen to her

deceased husband Conrad's plea for her to forgive him for their marriage of hell, but she has made up her mind

No!, No! No!, she is adamant about her decision she will not forgive him, and can't understand why he

is not in hell where he belongs. After she pours out her heart to Adar how he abused her physically and mentally

all of their married life and she hates him with a vengeance. Elizabeth leaves, not realizing that her husband's

spirit would remain evil because of her lack of forgiveness and would eventually be her downfall and end her life.



Summary: I felt a deep compassion reading this story because of how true this situation is with domestic violence.
I think the author's passion came through with this story. She demonstrated such visual descriptions
such as:
A trickle of sweat rolled down her forehead and swam inside her blue eyes. It was warm and
salty. It felt as if a drop of sea water, all the way from the Atlantic Ocean, had reached her like an omen.
Also the story demonstrates how much hatred could consume someone who is pushed over the edge
with constant abuse.
I give this a 5 because I could find no fault and only perfection in this written masterpiece of the dark
side.

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Review of Twenty  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Nikki, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your short story. My reviews are not technical
they are based on imagery and creativity.

 Twenty  (13+)
Outlines the unique stories of the people who have touched this 20 dollar bill.
#1878922 by Nikki
My first impression of this short story is how the author introduces the reader to a rich girl who

lives in an upscale apartment and drives a 2012 Lexus. She explains that she is only rich because she lives off of

her parents money and that if she didn't, she live in a crummy apartment. The next part of the story she tells

of how the monetary value of a bill that she is holding in her hand means nothing to her, but then she says there is

something more captivating about the bill. She wonders where the bill has been, how many people have

possessed it. What stories or secrets does it hold. She compares it to the ATM bills that are crisp and new, and

how this bill is soft and has a crease and numbers scratched on the bottom in blue ink. The author ends the

story with the girl remembering that she received the bill when she bought a bottle of expensive wine and asked

for cash back. Also the rich girl begins to be come convicted of her lavish lifestyle and realizes instead of

buying that expensive bottle of wine, she could have funded a water pump in Africa. She catches herself thinking

and starts to deny she needs the bill, that it belongs to someone else, and then again realizes that she has

now become a part of its history.

Summary: I thought this little short story carried a lot of depth and meaning. How many people would stop
and analyze where a bill of any denomination came from. The writer took a simple thing such as
twenty dollar bill and built a phenomenal story around a pretentious rich girl having a momentary
awakening in her shallow mind of the possibility of not only the value but the history of the bill.
I will never look at a twenty dollar bill the same way again. Exceptional writing.
I give this a 5 because of the creativity and the story's ability to provoke the reader to ponder about
a twenty dollar bill.

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Review of Perpetual War  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tom my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your poetry, I review from a perspective of what
the poem's meaning represents to me and the creativity.

 Perpetual War  (E)
A poem about battling inner demons
#1873395 by Tom
My first impression of this piece of poetry is the author has written about a battle between flesh

and the spiritual aspect of humanity. Everyday we live facing temptations of one kind or another

and there are very few self controlled people on the planet. You just have to look at the physical

wars that are in full force. The author writes about a night of torment and torture of temptation

and when the soul has struggled against being destroyed. Then comes morning and it starts all

over again, the soul's battle for survival against the flesh.

The author states this by these verses that stood out to me.

Then the morning comes with its Heavenly Light,
Giving the strength for the Battered Soul to vanquish Strife,
An Incorruptible Knight who slays the Dragon,
Is then slain by Twilight's infernal Creation.
And the Battle wages on...

Summary: I thought the author wrote a very thought provoking sophisticated but meaningful piece of poetry.
The words have almost a Shakespeare likeness to them. Full of imagery and visual projection.
I not only read the words, but I saw the soul battered and exhausted from the never ending
war for eternal peace. A very profound and moving piece of written poetry!

This just my opinion on how this poetry affected me personally.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Keiann, my name is Summer Wind and I'm pleased to review your first chapter of your novel.

Sins of a Woman-Chapter One   (13+)
She had the kind of beauty that would make a man sin. And sin he had. . .
#1872164 by keikei-love critical reviews!
My first impression of your first chapter of Sins of a Woman, is this introduction has all

the ear markings of a professional author. The author introduces the reader to Zaharra a

beautiful young girl who has lost her innocence to her cousin's lust and temptation.

Filled with guilt, for her transgression she finds herself trying to pray, but feels she is

too dirty and unclean for God to listen to her prayers. As she tries to pray she hears

a commotion at the bottom of the hill. It seems 400 to 500 men and woman have gathered

for a stoning of a woman caught in adultery named Abiah. Not only does Zaharra witness the

terrible event, but Abiah's son also is present at the stoning. The story reminds me of the time

when in the bible a woman caught adultery was set to be stoned, when Jesus intervened with

the statement which one of you is without sin cast the first stone, and they all dropped their stones

and left. Unfortunately there is no intervention in this story only judgement and anger prevail.

The woman is stoned to death with name calling of whore and filth and all the judgement the

Rabbi Ezra and the crowd can throw at her. The first chapter ends with Zaharra trying to comfort

the stoned woman's son after her death and the boy going home to a house where his father

who was always absent his now abandoned the boy for good.

Summary: This novel has the potential to be a marketable piece of literature by what I just read.
I loved the detail and the descriptions of the story, I thought it was very professional.
I can hardly wait for the next chapters of the story!! Fantastic writing!

This just my opinion on how this story affected me personally

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Review of A Conversation  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Christina I am Summer Wind and I have chosen your story to review for rising star to rising star review.

 A Conversation  (E)
"Everything comes in a perfect timeline.” (Featured in WDC Newsletters)
#1871750 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
My first impression of you the story is WOW! Your insight into spiritual matters of the Universe

is incredible. The writer takes the reader on an inside conversation of a human being discussing

their existence with God. It seems the being is losing the ability to go on, because their faith is

weakening and they question why? The gracious spirit of God is involved in rebuilding their

faith with statements like “Men spend their time searching for something that has never been

lost. When you look at a butterfly on a flowery tree does it know that I am the branch that

supports it?” The whole point of the story is about being grounded and trusting in a God that

you can't see. It doesn't matter what you think, just grab a hold of the creator of the Universe

and he will show you the path, after all He is in control. Every tiny grain of sand and everything

He has knowledge about. So let go and live TRUSTING HIM!

Summary: I felt like I was reading a Sunday sermon about life and putting your faith in God.
This conversation really struck a chord with me, because at this time in my life
I need to trust God being struck with a terrible illness. This conversation is
faith builder for me and I hope others that read it.
Well done Christina and THANK YOU! Bravo, such a lot of deep meaning and conviction in such few
words.

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Review of Free Range Meat  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello intheventofire my name is Summer Wind and I was browsing the Rising Stars and your portfolio caught my eye. I review on perspective not technical aspects.

 Free Range Meat  (13+)
Pale faced maidens and heroic paramedics? Not everything in this world is what it seems...
#1649276 by intheventofire
My first impression of this short short story is the author has written a matter of fact statement

about people who are free range. To me that means they do what they want no matter what the

consequences. They are the dregs of society that will not conform to any standard other than

what they think gives them freedom. The author tells of a girl who is about to bite the dust,

most likely because of her free range habit of using drugs that has destroyed her liver.

The author talks about how drugs whether legal or illegal are used in society from pain of a

teething of a child to pain from depression of a rebellious teenager. The author makes his

point quite clear with his view of this girl who he states will die on his watch and be another

free range piece of meat, along with other junkies, losers, and self haters.

Summary: I felt the author gave a chilling view of the reality of what he classifies range meat.
I had never thought of it from that perspective and it was a real eye opener.
A lot said in so few words. Well written!

This is only my honest opinion on how this story affected me personally.

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Review of Spunky Old Broads  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Rose my name is Summer Wind and I dropped by your port to review one of your poems. I'm not a technical
reviewer, more like what I perceive and feel from your writing.

 Spunky Old Broads  (13+)
The elder ladies of the 21st century
#1749757 by Rose Praying for Peace
After I read your poem I had a good laugh, because what you are stating in your poem is

quite true. Older women strive to keep up with the younger women. The verse I liked the most

is: They do yoga and Zumba There are no old lady sags Its Triphoria Not geritol you'll find in

their bags. The older woman does not want to be thought of as old, you only have to look at

the commercials for plastic surgery, weight loss pills and age defying supplements.


Summary: I thought the poem was well written with a lot of truth in it reflecting the way the older woman is today.
I liked the comparison of Maude and Edith and regular dinners, salon appointments to the modern
day life style of casual and anything goes. I also thought the writer demonstrated vivid imagery
through out the poem and great literary style. I enjoyed your humorous delightful poem.

This is just my opinion on how the poem affected me personally

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello B.Scholl, my name is Summer Wind, and I saw your entry in the contest and thought I would review it.
My review is more like a movie review, not technical. I review on my perspective of the meaning of the story to me.

 
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The Darkness in Her Soul  (E)
How two women deal with the same heartbreak.
#1670511 by BScholl
My first impression when I read your story was how God has plan for everything. Denise a grief

stricken woman is wandering down the road, not knowing where she was going after her car

was downed from a storm. She continues walking and she stumbles upon a farm house that

seems abandoned, but little does she know that in that farmhouse is a woman who shares that

the same grief of loosing a son also. As she is making herself at home thinking the there is no one

there, she is surprised when she hears a voice speak to her in the darkness. Soon the old woman

Martha and Denise are sharing their heartaches of how they lost their sons and their family

histories. In this story of the accidental meeting of the two women there is a common ground

of how they lift each other's burdens of grief by sharing their stories. Of course I don't believe

for a minute if this was a real life story this would be an accident or coincidence. I believe it

would be arranged by a loving God who wanted both women to be a support system for each other.

In the end of the story Denise calls her sister and leaves Martha's home, but she doesn't want the

friendship to end with this dear woman, so she proposes to come and visit or take her out for

dinner the next week.

Summary: This story is a tear jerker, because of the grief of the two women and how it almost destroys them,
until an unusual meeting brings them together to hold each other up.
I loved this story and I applaud the author for a well written story with a lot of emotional depth and
vivid word description. Also excellent character interaction.

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Review of Baseball Pie  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello J. Dillard, my name is Summer Wind, and I saw your entry in the contest and thought I would review it.
My review is more like a movie review, not technical. I review on my perspective of the meaning of the story to me.

 Baseball Pie  (E)
Two people meeting over pie
#1867116 by J Dillard
My first impression is that the author opens the story with a man named Dave who is a homeless

man who has stopped for a minute at a baseball field on his way down town. It seems Dave often

stopped at the baseball field and wished his son could have played there and sometimes he would

watch a game. Tonight would be different, he was about to have an encounter with a small boy

that would overwhelm him for just a moment. The author introduces a little boy who is

very much like Dave. The two characters have loneliness in common. The little boy lost his father

and his mother was never home, or attentive to him. The parallel of the two characters is the

time they both spend at the baseball field wishing for what could have been. The end the author

brings Dave and the little boy together, as the little boy makes a gesture of kindness by offering

up his piece of apple pie in a brown paper bag that he is holding. Dave tries to refuse, but the

little boy is persistent, until he finally takes it and the boy smiles, turns and walks away.

Summary: I thought this story was very well written. It showed a short lived encounter of two lonely people
looking for the same thing, a moment of being recognized and accepted by another human being.
Also the two characters had a love for the game of baseball. A beautiful touching story!
Again this is very close to reality, of how many people are alone in their lives and overwhelmed.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello Christina my name is Summer Wind and I'm reviewing your short story.

The Shadow That Came (2nd. and 3rd.)  (18+)
"What is beyond darkness?" It asked me. (1st. SUPERNATURAL WRITING CONTEST)
#1867995 by ChrisDaltro-Chasing Moonbeams
My first impression of this short story is the author opens the story challenging the reader with

the fact that you don't control your life. Each of us has a demon and angel assigned to us. In fact

this story is about what you think about, controls your life. The author explains that one day she

woke up with this demon inside of her taking over her mind soul and body. She tells of how her

evil thoughts have given it complete dominion over her and their is no escape. The demon

relates to her that the author's suicidal thoughts brought it to her. It tells her the moment she

put the blade to her neck and one tiny drop of blood fell, it could smell it miles away in dark

unholy places. The story than leads into where the author and the demon argue back and

forth about the lack of understanding and faith that the author has about existence of the

universe and then because of her human frailty and confusion the demon gains the upper hand.

In complete despair and weakness of being overcome by the determination of the evil,

the author speaks of wishing to die again and finally succumbs to suicide. The story ends

with the author warning the reader to keep negative and evil thoughts away from our minds.

She warns to the reader to fight the evil and tells of the place where she is residing there are

no angels, only heat and pain and sadness.


Summary: In my opinion the author has given the reader an inside look inside the mind of a suicide victim.
How a victim would question existence, good and evil and possibly be engaged with a conversation
of the evil side of his conscience pushing them into a dire circumstance of taking their own life.
I thought the author gave an interesting and frightening view of the reality of the confused and
fearful mind of the overworked imagination of someone who is suicidal.
I can't say I enjoyed reading this, it was too real and should be a wake up call for all of us.
I can say it was thought provoking and well written.

This is only my opinion on how the story affected me personally

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