This is a very touching story. YOur writing style is very saddening, yet good. I've noticed your work and commented on previous posts, but this one is very true to you, I think. The rest don't come close to describing you as a person. I feel like I'm looking inside your head and realizing how these people helped you and how much you admire them. This really is inspirational. Keep up the great work.
Wow, this story was very original. I tried to imagine what could possibly happen after she blew the whistle. Nothing came close to what did happen. I think you've got a great talent. This story proves that. Your imagination is very large. I encourage you to continue writing.
Awww...That story was so cute. The plot was very creative and although it was short, it still had a well thought out beginning and middle. The end was actually very concluding even though you don't exactly know what happens. I think you're on your way to becoming a great writer.
Wow, I really liked that story. I can't wait to continue and find out what's going to happen. That last question disturbs me too and I wonder what exactly it is she's getting into. Your style is well thought out and immedietaly attracts the reader. I think you have a wonderful talent. Keep it up!
The concept was quite creative, I liked it, but as I said about your three wishes poem, the rhyming sounds very forced and cliche. It would be better to have an unrhyming poem then a poem with lack of rhythm or forced rhyme. I think you should work on that. Maybe even trying free verse, that way you aren't trapped within the confines of matching words and rythm.
This essay was very creative in how you brought two concepts, necessity and vanity, and created offspring for them. And it wasn't just some strange and random babble offspring, but rather, the offspring these two parents created made sense. I loved the flow of this essay and how it did seem rather random, but it still had this sense to it, something I think would be hard to make out by some. I encourage you to furthur your opinions in such a way as you have done.
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