I love the idea of a wall barrier and the real emotion behind your writing. I can tell when someone's making things up and when they're actually sitting there and writing exactly what they are thinking and feeling; this is the latter. Nicely done.
I love the idea of this, and the confiding, jolly way it is written.The beginning is a little confusing as to where you are, but it gets clearer in the third paragraph. I especially like the end.
Very good..... it made me think. There a couple of typos, but they can be easily fixed. I love the ending:
"Just listen to me and
"when it's your turn
"I will do the same"
Keep writing!
So observant! I love the way you describe things, it shows me that every sense is alert when you're outside. Thank you for picking me up out of my chair and dropping me into the middle of an crisp autumn day...
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