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Review by H.R. Rollins
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
That was sweet. The only thing that bothered me was that there were a couple little parts where there were sentences that weren't really full sentences. I realize this is a stylistic choice. Other than that, it was pretty awesome though.
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Review by H.R. Rollins
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm not sure how important the city names are, but if there are a lot I will have trouble keeping it all straight throughout I think. I know sometimes fantasy books will have a map of where the story takes place. That could be helpful for this story, but I don't know that it is necessary. Overall, I really dug the whole viking feel to this chapter. I also liked how serious things got for Theminor so quickly. I'm not so sure how I felt about the yellow eyes at the end of the chapter, but I think my opinion on that will depend on how it plays out. So far, this story is really good though.
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Review by H.R. Rollins
Rated: E | (4.5)
This prologue really pulls you in, and makes you want to read the whole thing. I had to read the bit about how the game worked a couple times to make sure I got it, but I'm pretty sure that was an issue with me and not the writing itself. I'm sure that makes me sound like an idiot since it was fairly simple, but I still had to make sure I had it right. Even from the beginning there are elements to this story I know I'll like, such as the game being played between the good and evil gods. I'm not sure I really have anything bad to say about it.
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