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Review by Miss Invisible
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very interesting poem. For the most part your rhythm and rhyming went quite well, although sometimes your rhyming didn't quite work out well, or at least in my opinion sounded a little odd. For example, "something" and "pumpkin" don't quite rhyme, unless you pronounce something as somethin'. Also, when you are talking about feeling a power, talking about how it doesn't go with a shower made me feel like the effect was ruined a bit. Another word that rhymes with power is flower, so I would suggest something like "I feel a strange power, I feel it blossoming like a flower", or something. You do not need to change your poem according to what I think; the best way to write a poem is to write by your instinct. Still, overall, nice poem! Keep writing!
==Miss Invisible
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