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Review of Breathlessness  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This feels like a breakup apology when to people don't want to actually break up. It makes me want to cry a little bit. I love how you use "central muscle' instead of heart, that is very unique and not cliche! great job.


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Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love the flowing sing song of the wording. I could picture each step. Though it has a sad ending, its a beautiful work and very well done.


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Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oooo. That ladt line... nothing more true.

I dont know when the last time i saw cars stop for the passing of a hearse. And that makes me sad.

The overall tone of this fits so well with the entirety of the last year and a half.

Beautifully written. Looking forward to reading more of your work.


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Review of Tea Time  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is adorable! The child like enjoymentis outstanding. And i agree tea parties are for everyone
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Review of Last Night  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love that twist at the end after all that honey tipped bit of seduction.
You produce very vivid images with your words. It flows nicely in rhythm.

Great job
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Review of Sincerely, yours  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (4.0)
Oooo. Im liking the flow if this.
It blends quickly from desperation to be seen, (quite possibly to be love) to. I realize im better than you think.
I like the use of the word pretentious here. It shows the author is sophisticated.

The ending makes me wonder why they felt they owed someone themself when thst wasnt being given.

Great job. Keep writing.
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Review of All jokes aside  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is deep. Very self aware to know you're being used and choosingn to stay and feud despite wanting and needing to be done. Wanting to be but everything knowing you were their nothing.
Brovo. Very well written
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Review of Darker Than Black  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Wow. Very real, with raw emotion And so many people relate.

The 2nd stanza stands out to me the most because i now how real grief thieves joy.

Keep writing !!


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Review of Aloneness  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
im left wondering what mark he eventually made. Did he find enjoyment once surrendering?

Thought provoking piece.
Id love to read a sequel

N.
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Review of The Fury  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
ooo. I love how commanding this poem is. A serman, a native song and dance to bring the tempest!!
The power. I can hear the the thunder and see the lightning streak the sky and like the dark storm.

I cannot tell you how much i love this!!
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Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Reminds me of high school. Always wanting to fit it, but never quite right.
The tag along; the accepted 3rd or 5th wheel in a room full of couples.


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Review of Storm Colors  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
Ooooo yes.. its so romantic. Is it ok that driving to work on an about to storm day is romantic?
I love the description of the greens against the grey.
And how orange turns to rust.
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Review of Write Stuff  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel this in my core! Great job


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Review of spineless  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
How crushing. It’s starts so light and lovely like the first flicker of youthful love. Then crashes like waves of a hurricane. So beautifully tragically written


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Review of Darkness  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is raw! So honest. I know so many can relate. Great imagery
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Review of Dancing Babies  
Review by n.lea
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wow. Very vivid.
My favorite...
"Terrorized under violent palms which squeeze too tight."

Such an interesting image.

Great job
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Review of Dawn  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the imagery that you use to describe the cycle of life as a war.
The only suggestion I have for you is that if you are going to use the ellipses in the second stanza, take out the fourth period. The fourth in grammar means you aren't going to finish the thought. Continuing after makes the piece look jumbled. At the end of the piece if you want to leave it so the reader is guessing, just leave it at the fourth, the fifth period just seems excessive.

I do love the ending. It is so very encouraging and leaves the reader on a positive note.

Great Job.
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Review of Highway Miles  
Review by n.lea
Rated: E | (5.0)
this gave me shivers. makes me wonder at the loss of a partner for a lifetime. It sings of pain and loneliness
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