An incredible work of fiction that beautifully portrays childhood as the simple, honest, naive time of life that it should be! Thank you for a wonderful read!
Well written, with a fairy tale beginning that never reveals the hell that you later lived. So many of us have lived that hell. I commend you for having the courage to write about it!
This is a well written work of fiction, based on several of several of societies issues - from mental illess and the homeless, to the pollution of our bodies of water. The author does an exceptional job of capturing the scene and creating a portrait of Benny in the mind's eye.
You have brilliantly portrayed my own ill natured (when sick with a cold) husband. What little sympathy our husbands have when we ourselves are ill, but high expectations they have of us when they are down and out - chicken soup, keep the volume low on both the voices of the children and the television...
I chose this work to give a newbie a chance at a R/R.
I knew, based on the title, that this work would not be my 'style'. From the first, this work is apparently written by a teen writer. This particular work is listed as comedy, but in my opinion lacks the basic principles of humor. It is very difficult to read, as it is not broken down into paragraph form, the writer goes a bit overboard with the capitalization (emotions can be expressed with appropriate punctuation), and the run on (and on) telephone numbers and email addresses left me not wanting to finish reading this work. Thanks for the read.
You have portrayed a significant loss and the care of Hospice beautifully. Only those who have lived through a Hospice 'assisted' death can truly grasp the concept of Hospice.
Thank you for sharing your story of grief, loss and Hospice with me.
Large Bills First is the story of a bank robbery, though one should never judge a book by it's cover. Look inside for a well rounded story with an unexpected ending!
I'd love to see this work again after you have fine tuned it. This particular work speaks to me, having grown up in a home such as this. You are off to a wonderful start!
Making love, runny eggs, meeting at the park - efforts of the man to complete a lackluster relationship. The efforts, she understands, are not genuine - that he is resistant to committment. I find that this piece is demonstrative of today's relationships.
This piece is heavy on 'he said', 'she said' - perhaps you could rephrase a portion of these.
#985742 I thoroughly enjoyed the flavor with which you shared your cake mix epiphany. I would love to know how you would handle the story that didn't have an ending...yet...and may never.
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