Well, it's properly written, but kinda lacks a bit of umph for an essay. Particularly the beginning. When writing an essay, you don't just suddenly give the topic at the start. You ought to try and write something that will reel the reader in. Make them curious to know what exactly they're going in for. A suggestion would be to place the first line somewhere else in the first paragraph. Particularly, before the quoting Martha Manning. This way, when your readers read the first lines, they will be intrigued and curious to know what exactly is this "It" that you are talking about.
Another suggestion would be to make the second paragraph into the second last paragraph. It's just an opinion, but it feels like it would have a stronger flow if done so. Besides that, everything is written quite beautifully, describing what you believe Depression is.
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