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Review of When you need me  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi mysticsierra,

Well I like how you just throw things together. LOL! I too love poetry and just writing my hearts content, unfortunatley I delve in and forget to edit, hopefully in this new class we can learn and grow. Have a great day.
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Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Lee,

I really liked this story, even though the ending was so sad. You are a good stroy teller, thanks for sharing on here. Have a wonderful day.
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Review of Mommy's Bad Girl  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi and welcome to WDC!!

My review to you is meant only in the spirit of helping you, please take from it what you will.

I see this poem as dark and lonely. The author shows how a mother and daughter's bond can sometimes just not exist. It is good work, strong and emotional.

My only advice, You don't have to add the title in the body of the work as it is added for you when you fill out the information to write. You are able to go back and edit your piece at anytime. I hope to read more of your work, great luck to you and Happy Writing.
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Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hi seth,

This is in my most humble opinion and only meant to help you, please take from it the positive.

There are many mispelled words;

I suggest you edit it by using spell check on your computer, it will give you options. Also, space your paragraphs, it will make your piece flow and look better. I know that when you are in the middle of the story and your feelings and thoughts are flowing fast, we tend to forget to add words or maybe add where there should not be. I do it all the time. LOL

I wish you luck, I can't wait to reread this story. Good luck to you and Happy Writing.

Irisisflower
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Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: E | (4.5)
In my humble opinion this is a great piece, it flows well and it shows what the author is feeling. Good job! Have a great day and Happy Writing!

Irisisflower
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Review of I am not  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Raevyn,

THis is just my humble opinion, I mean it only in the sense to be able to help you. Take from it what you will.

I think this poem has too many I am not, I got lost in the story because I was distracted with all the I am nots. LOL

Maybe you can edit it and make it flow better by letting the I am not appear on every second line or three?

I reread it and think it is a strong piece, it shows your emotions really well, I think you were angry when you created this or very upset. I can't wait to read more of your works, don't stop writing and good luck to you. Have a wonderful day.

Irisisflower
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Review of Ghost Lover  
Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This author has good writing skills, the only think I would recommend is better punctuation throughout. I think also it might flow better if it were not spaced so far apart.

THis is just my humble opinion, I do hope to read more of your work, don't stop writing and good luck to you! Have a wonderful day.

Irisisflower
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Review of Honeysuckle Wind  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi caraconner,

In my humble opinion, this is to try and help you, please don't take it too hard.

You could go back and use better punctuation, I got lost and did not really see the story you wrote because it distracted me. With the correct punctuation, you can better guide your audience to pause at the right moment and feel what you feel.

I hope to read more of your work, you show great promise. Poetry is my genre, it is how I allow my thoughts and experiences to come through. Maybe you could read one of mine and tell me what you think? thanks.

Have a wonderful day and good luck to you.

Irisisflower
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Review of My Dog  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi emeli,

I like your story very much, you show alot of love and emotion in your writing. My advice to you is the following;

Capitalize your i's and place two spaces after every period, for example after your first sentence, you ended it with "bithday.I went...." it should look like; 'birthday. I went to..'

I can't wait to read more of your stories you will have to share here. Great luck to you and have fun, don't stop writing.

Have a happy day.

Irisisflower
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Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In my humble opinion, This is a good story. I felt captivated by the characters. This author has good writing strength and the ability to pull the reader in and want to learn more. I hope to read of this author's works. Happy Writing
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Review of Wonderland  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
In my humble opinion, this author shows a different take on what should be the warning Alice recieves BEFORE entering. I hope to read more works from this author. I wish you luck and Happy Writing to you.
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Review of Ghost of Heaven  
Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is a strong message of hope. This author has gift of words. In my humble opinion.

My suggestions will be to use puctuation throughout, there is no concise use of them. Line #15, com needs an e. Line 25 & 26 seems a tad bit out of sink, I am not sure if the word is meant to be 'to those'? or is it though? It seems to break the rythm and flow of the poem, but picks back up at line 29.

I wish you luck with your future works. Happy writing.
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Review of Wippedd Words  
Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This piece shows us exactly what most writers go through. We sit, we ponder and become slave to the words. We tend to forget to just share what is in us and not allow the words to become stumbling blocks. I enjoy the comedy of the author. His mind taking control and making him see and feel things in a different light. Great work, in my humble opinion. Have a wonderful day!
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Review of The Lessons  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem made me feel a variety of things; joy, happiness, sadness, melencholy. It shows the bond between a boy and his granpa. This is a sweet poem, a great tribute to time spent learning and exploring. It shows a little of what the power of love has over us.
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Review of A Mother'sPrayer  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I relly enjoyed this author's poem. The story flows easy as she explains the communication and lack of with her daughter. The words explain the pain and anguish mixed with the joy and pride of being a caring parent, intent on staying clued in to what her child is feeling. Happy writing.
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Review of I'm Not Alone  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoy this author's humor. This is, I think, every single mom's point of view. I enjoy the style of which this author used to communicate the struggles, hopes and dreams she is faced with. I like the faithfulness she shows and obidience and humor with God, I think that humor is the greatest tool we have.
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Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This author seems to have a passion for what is being asked of him in the poem. The use of inquiry for his part in what God has in plan for us is evident. It reads and rhymes smoothly. The only suggestion I have is that towards the end, above the seventh paragraph, there is one extra double space. Happy writing.
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Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Dave,

WOW!!!! Your story is amazing. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. I am crying for joy, sadness and most of all hope. You are a great story teller, I am glad to know your boys are now grown and causing you great joy. I do believe that was an angel giving you comfort that day. I am sure that he is happy knowing that you remember him and feel greatful. Happy writing and Thanks again.
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Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Carrie,

In my humble opinion, this was good. I have just a couple of suggestions. I feel this could look better if you did not have the double spacing. Also, the second to the last sentence has a typo, you typed, "I am envy those" I think you meant "I am envious of those"?.

I look forward to seeing more of your work, have a great day and happy writing to you.
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Review of Outward.  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

In my humble opinion, this is a smart poem, your words have clear meaning and good rhyme. I did have a little trouble at the ending, but after I read it outloud and pronouned it a little different, it did flow. Good luck with your writing, I hope to see more of your work. Happy writing.
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Review of Gone  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Good job. The poem brings the reader to know exactly what is going through your mind and heart. Suggestion to you would be to leave the title and your name out of the body of context as it is added for you at the top of the page. This is good work and you show promise. Have a great day.
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Review of The Start of Love  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chrisna,

In my humble opinion this poem is good. It is short yet very much to the point. You have a good way of letting your feelings come through in your poem. I can't wait to see more of your work. One idea you could try, I find this useful and fun, is to find other words to convey your meaning, make your poem stand out by using words that leave the reader wondering and wanting to know more. Good luck to you and keep writing.
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Review of heartache  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem is truly sad, but I find it good in that the author brings across raw emotions. I feel that lack of spelling is what might hold this poem from being great. I like the melencholy feel of it, but also that the author is somehow letting go of the pain through the words. It holds a mixture of longing, hope and of course pain.
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Review of m hearts keeper  
Review by Irisisflower
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (3.5)
Please take this as a helpful suggestion and as my humble opinion.

I feel the flow of the poem is good, it is clear and it has good rhyme.

My only concern are the errors in spelling, lack of capitilization and punctuation. For example; on the fifth line, years have gone by, not bye. The 8th line is missing a word before apart, I am guessing you meant to put 'are'. Line 13, use is missing the letter d. Line 18, bestfriends should be two words.

Your work reminds me of mine, in that I also write in the moment and freely express my feelings and thought. I can see you have passion, I truly would like to read more of your work. Keep writing and I hope this helps.
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Review of do they belong  
Review by Irisisflower
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi adam,

This is good. I would like to recommend you use capitalization in your work, it will help make it stand out. It is just my humble opinion. I know that when I write, in the moment of the emotion, editing is the last thing on my mind. We all have our own style, I recognize yours, I write in the same style. This site will be of great help to you if you take all the reviews for what they are meant for, to help. Not everyone will agree with your style, but just keep going, learn something from every review and you will soon find yourself taking bits and pieces that will help make you a better writer. Great luck to you, I hope you stop by my port, please tell me what you think. Happy writing.
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