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Review of The Fartmeisters  
Review by TheNewJaxson
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This item has a lot of potential for more interesting things to happen on top of the ones currently written about. There is the making of a lot of great characters that need to be fleshed out just a little. Elena is by far the most realized character and has the voice of a little girl who really is worried about making and keeping a friend. It comes across in the writing and seems genuine, giving us a great character. I think it was a great idea pairing her up with another character who doesn't fart like she does so that the interplay and tension between them seems real and makes sense. Not every farting interactive has to have all the characters love farts. *cough* like mine does *cough* The story proceeds normally with no out of place moments that take you out of the story. It's written with real chapters instead of a plethora of choice chapters, which only brings the enjoyment up and makes it fun to read. I hope to see this interactive grow, and flourish because I truly think it has the makings of a great one.
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Review by TheNewJaxson
Rated: E | (5.0)
A lot of things that needed to be said were said. This has my respect and my thanks.
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