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Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
hmm, it doesnt lead up to much, I see its only chapter 1, but it is a veeerry short chapter.. I like the character models youve put for stevenson and blake, but cracker and Eddy dont really have a voice. Im curious as to where its going to go, Im sure the body plays some type of integral role.. I like stevensons rant on the stupid question, people can relate because its a common question- makes me think of the way Quentin Terantino fills his tense moments with interesting conversation- to build up tension.. Try and make ch 2 longer.
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