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Rated: E | (4.5)
Ha, i liked that.

Your use of interrogative dialogue was done quite well and the general cheeky tone helped to draw me in.

I was learning along side the perspective character and that worked well in the favor of keeping me interested.

Good Job!
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hey Mate, the way that you've opened your piece was good, it worked quite well in grabbing my attention and pulling me in, one thing i would recommend is to add tag lines to your dialogue, this may help to increase the flow of your writing, other than that, great job.
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