Overall Impression ✅
Superb! Talk about a story that keeps the readers full attention, this is it. Every word, every sentence, every paragraph is digested in anticipation to what will happen next.
Thoughts ✅
Wonderful story line along with character absorption through thorough detail. Occasionally the reader asks themselves 'could this have really happened?' or even "Did this happen to the author?.' Although of course that's because of the believable writing fashion.
Considerations ✅
None.
Parting Comments ✅
Keep up the excellent writing and I look forward to reading more, and hope you stop by to read one of my pieces.
Overall Impression ✅
It was good but didn't really keep my attention, more or less I would say I was hoping the ending would really catch my interest, but that was partially a let down although quite funny.
Thoughts ✅
I think that there could have been a bit more enthusiasm, and an extra revise or edit. Grammar mishaps as far as the use of punctuations.
Considerations ✅
I would consider using quotation marks, and also dignifying the details of who the characters really are. Although i so understand with being as short as the story is, that substantiating the full character of those in the story can be somewhat difficult.
Parting Comments ✅
Good job and keep up the motivation that feeds your writing.
I like it how shirt it is, this is a really good poem and definitely caught me off guard. Continue the great work and just like you I like to make my writings realistic. Keep it up and please feel free to read my work and leave feedback. I will surely be reading more of your work.
Good introduction. The feel of what is happening is surely present in this part of your story. Besides the grammar and spacing issues I like the way you have detailed certain area of the story. Although detail a bit more throughout crucial parts to the story. I really enjoy where this is going and can't wait to read more from you.
Your writing style is really good, a bit laid back but nonetheless very detailed and well-written. I really enjoy how the characters have personality and are interacting smoothly with each other. Your imaginative Sci-Fi style is a good read, and the ending is my favorite part. Keep up the good work and writing.
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