The strong emotional feeling is quite powerful. All of us at some point in our lives have experienced unrequited love and the pain it brings. I had some issues with the poem clarity. Is this a person you have met? Is this a person that rejected you? Is this a person only in your imagination? I think the poem could be stronger if you make the meaning universal. Who is the person that makes you feel this strong emotion? Why do you enjoy the person destroying your mental focus? Continue editing this potentially powerful poem on the joy and pain that love brings to you. You have the beginning of a theme that could resonate with all of your readers. Read more poets that write of love like Keats and Byron. Yeats is my personal favorite. When You Are Old, by Yeats is a poem that is my favorite love poem. Keep reading and emulate your favorite poets. Keep poetry alive by writing and reading. We are all in this quest together.
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