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Review of Morning Alarm  
Review by Jim Binz
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Generally speaking, a nice story. I felt there were a couple of awkward moments in there. Once, when you write that the side lights were blinking "dimly" in the daylight. I don't see dimly as the word you want there. The other was when you wrote that the alarm was turned off and then "The lack of honking horn was deafening in my ears". Cute, but again, a little awkward. I think I know what you are trying to express here, but you need to try again. There seems to be a better way to describe that feeling. Overall, a nice short piece. Well done!
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