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Review by Jaren
Rated: E | (4.5)
“El Cid
has come for us!”
This should be: “El Cid has come for us!”

"El Cid’s Birth Family, Upbringing, and Setting"
You forgot a comma after "Birth", and in the title after this one, "El Cid’s Family, Comrades, and Superiors" you have family again.

"him from her inheritance of
Zamora."
"Zamora" did not need to be on another line.

"battlefield were now his king’s
advisers, and they did not forgive easily. Eventually,"
Again, a new line was started when it wasn't needed.

"many of his
knights."
ditto

"In skirmishes, the
Moors were often victorious."
ditto

I liked the paper overall, and once those minor typographical errors are corrected, the paper will be perfect. Well, maybe not perfect, but close.
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