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Review of Bard Soap  
Rated: E | (4.0)
The setting is unlikely, but it was no doubt refreshing. I didn't see the Shakespearian quotes coming. It worked hilariously well, however. ^_^

On the down side, the story lacked some sort of description. A description of the environment or of an object would have enriched the plot. Apart from this, the story is well written and well formatted overall, deserves a 4.

As a quick suggestion, I believe
And Fels stood there confidently, with a big grin.

Sudsheimer pushed back his leather chair and slowly rose.

should be

And Fels stood there confidently, with a big grin. Sudsheimer pushed back his leather chair and slowly rose.
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