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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm sorry for your loss. You were very good with using descriptive language to describe how you and your family felt after the death of your brother. I would suggest that you consider using a wider variety of language and vocabulary. I think it would increase your ability to get the reader to understand exactly what you want to portray.
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