A very touching piece, you have described the bond of mother and child beautifully. There were no obvious grammatical errors that I could spot and the three singular words at the very beginning made for a dramatic and enthralling start. My only note would to perhaps be careful that the phrase “Ill’git’ment child!” is clear since, having no context built at this point, it took a moment to decode what the word was.
Very interesting, I want to find out what he will do next! :)
Thank you! A really helpful piece with some excellent insights into the publishing world. I will definitely be coming back to it when I'm ready to approach publishers :)
This was a really enjoyable story. I loved how Dianne and Karen's characters interacted with each other, just how good friends do. I look forward to reading more of your work :)
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