REVIEW OF MORNING ARDOR:
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THEME: The main theme of short poem, as I understand, a physical desire. The writer has made some efforts to make its reader feel how does this desire gets activated before dawn. This short poem tells about the thoughts arise in human body for this passion.
The writer has used nice words to express sensual and sextual concept. Good combination of copulation and coition.
SUGGESTION:
To be an honest reviewer, its my duty to suggest the author to use of some words easily understood by its readers. Combination of strong and simple words might have made the content more luscious and interesting.
REVIEW OF DEAR DIARY:
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The writer has written about the significance of a diary in her life. From the beginning to end, the has played three different roles in her life.
CHILDHOOD ROLE:
When the writer was child, she would write real things like snowing, drizzling, raining, etc, all natural thoughts.
ADOLESCENCE ROLE:
When the writer went to college, she started writing the things that actually happened with her such as her boy friend, kisses, love, etc.
AFTER SHE BECME MOTHER:
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When the writer became mother, she writer her matured thoughts and ides in her diary.
THEME OF POEM:
As a reader and reviewer, I find that the same diary has different roles to play from time to time. And when secret ideas and thoughts are put into it, the writer has shown the necessity of hiding those facts from others. The poem gives a lesson that a child needs to be taught why and how to write a diary, and cultivates a good habit.
SUGGESTION:
Being a reviewer, I need to be more honest while giving my suggestion for further improvement. I suggest the writer to make valuable connections between two paragraphs and sentences so that a reader is interested in reading it from beginning to end. I find in some paragraphs and sentences that connections are missing.
REVIEW OF INSPIRE ME:
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The writer has expressed her heart feelings for her everlasting love very succinctly. The writer has highlighted her love nd affection for her husband.
THEME:
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As a reviewer, theme of poem is everlasting true relationship between two loves, husband and wife which I find it very loving and charming. Reader may feel how a husband cares for her wife in her career building and fulfilling her burning goals. In this poem, husband gives freedom to his love to fly high in the sky to accomplish her goals. Inspirational poem for two tfrue relation.
SUGGESTIONS:As a reviewer, I advise the wrier to make use of some strong poetic words, since it will make the poem more readable and meaningful. Selection of good words is the vital part of any good writing.
written WITH GOOD THOUGHTS AND FEELINGS.
All the best Lisa.
REVIEW OF MALE VOICE:
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The writer has made an attempt to create a situation when male character wishes to forget the past as her love has ditched him,and no more soft corner for her.
I personally feel REPETION of words might have been avoided.
REVIEW OF FEMALE VOICE:
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The female part of the poem says that she also loves him no more as he had deep feeling for someone else. Both character have been featured blaming each other for the lost past love.
CONCLUSION:
After reading from beginning to end, the poem looks like a conversation between two kids. Use of poetic words missing. Reader may find it difficult to understand the end theme.
Poet is advised to make use of some meaningful words, which has direct impact on the mind of a prudent reader. Good efforts and keep up the tempo.
REVIEW BY EKANT
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first and second paragraph
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It seems that the writer has expressed his concern over over-population by 2045 resulting in cancer, flood, allergies and uncontrollable nuclear threats to humanity. But the writer says shortage OF FOOD will be the biggest challenge.
By 2048,increasing level of pollution may kill the vegetation life, flora and fauna, and a new poisonous spider grass will exist. All living creatures will die from starvation, and the entire earth will become a giant who may eat up the whole human community.
Third and fourth Paragraph:
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By 2052,as writer says, a summit is convened to face the threat by genetic manipulation, but not much hope. The whole world may be covered by alpacas spider grass, the main food then. But for growing hunger, it will not be sufficient and may shift to other alpacas food stuffs, which are today known as junk food.
Fifth and Sixth Paragraphs:
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All factories and textiles companies will produce alpacas products. Ultimately, a day comes when alpacas growth will surpass the human population. The alpaca population will be growing more than human population, hence alpaca evolution took place, They developed better technology than human population.
With their better technology, alpaca civilization overtook human community and had full control over everything. They posed a awful and dreadful threat to human civilization, and human civilization failed to challenge the threat.
Seventh paragraph:
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Now human civilization was completely at the mercy of alpaca civilization. Human beings just
will become their bonded workers and slaves.
CONCLUSION:
The writer has imagined a picture when biggest threat will be hunger and new spaca civilization will take over human civilization and we all will be their slaves.
The writer has a very amazing imagination about future. He has expressed his vision. Reviewer feels that the main concern of the writer is about protecting natural resources with control over population. Also has written if the flora-fauna and eco-system are not on the priority lists of human beings, then the situation may arise in the form of alpaca and spider grass.
The reviewer is impressed with the main concern of the writer.
REVIEW:
As a curious reader, I find many errors like punctuation, spelling, coma,full stop.
Though the writer has expressed his concern for a mom, but it seems he has written the short article half-heartedly with no sincere efforts coupled with many errors.
Beyond doubt, every mother is always great and will remain great. Her remarkable signs of sacrifices are everlasting. Every child must remain ever indebted to her love and affection.
The writer is advised, next time before writing an article, to do proper home work.
Hi! Alas one more human being passed away!
The writer or reporter has expressed a detailed report in brief.
REVIEW:
After reading the article, it appears that writer is very badly hurt and has sentiments.
It is matter of grave concern that human rights are frequently violated in Bngladesh. In the past also many human rights writers and journalists have lost their lives. High level investigations are need of the hour.
The content of the article is sorrowful and full of contempt. Reader may be shocked to read it. No room for hatred.
Conclusion:
Theme is good and content is readable.
Hello! First let me congrats for a poem on nature.
SHORT AND SUCCINT REVIEW:
The writer has tried to put his inner soul into words. These words further reflect in the soul of nature. I feel the writer's soul and heart are very close to nature and his thoughts are deeply floating in the lap of nature.
Very nice and great description of flora and fauna i.e. mountain, trees, peaks, snow, waterfalls, etc.
Last paragraph impressed me a lot. Your soul and heart very curious to come out of a prison of cubicle cabin made of steel bars and bricks.
All the beswt and keep on writing on nature as revieweerr also very touchy about nature.
Hi! First of all let me wish you all the best for your forthcoming anniversary. May all your ardent dreams and desires come true.
Poem is short and precise. Good attempt to give your anniversary a triangle look. Simple words and good theme.
Marriage is a bonding between two souls never to separate.
Its not an agreement, but a bridge between two hearts made by bricks of trust and faith.
The writer has tried to pour his or he feelings into the poetry.
Poem could be a longer one with using some good vocabulary.
After reading the story from beginning to end, a reader can easily understand, only after giving two rounds of reading, that the story is based on the theme of unknown and invisible power.
In the first part of story, the couple have shifted to their new house and planned to arrange the household items in order and main burden fell on shoulders of Lorna, wife of James. To some extent, the writer fails to make his readers understand fully his ideas.
SECOND PART:
I feel James, husband of Lorna, is phycho and a short tempered character. He goes on shouting at Lorma for not cooking his dinner. Suddenly, the writer has allowed the entry of an unknown and invisible lady, named Maria as a saviour to protect Lorma from atrocities, barbarity and heinousness of her husband James. In middle part of story, James is killed and Lorma has been made free from all kinds of cruelty of James.
THIRD AND LAST PART:
Lorna has been sent to jail by the police on the charges of murder of her husband, though no such strong witness or proof are found as I understand. The end part is very confusing and clumsy. If the writer has shown the ghost as a protector of Lorna, then why sent to Jail. Very shocking and painful end.
As a reader and reviewer, I personally feel, the death of James should have been shown as a natural death, so that Lorna would not have been sent to jail. Here, the writer has failed to tell its reader how the supernatural power was able to be the real protector of Lorna. The story is all about spectre, wraith and haunt.
Also, the writer has attempted use of short vocabulary words, which are of little importance to its reader and it may perturb him. Rather simple and common words might have taken place. A reader may have to take two or three rounds of reading to catch the real theme of the story.
The writer is advised to:
*make more use of simple and common words
*end the story where a reader understands the theme
*not to mess up ideas which are not connected to each other.
Hi!I appreciate your honesty and sincerity in writing for freedom of Nethal.
What I understand that Nethal was ruled by the evils and freedom was a dream for its citizens. Nethal was completely under the black shadow of evil powers and the people were struggling it hard for freedom.
Then, suddenly, magical stone played its role to finish the evil powers, and it happened. Then, children and citizens of Nethal celebrated these happy moments joyfully.
But, that moment of joy and happiness was a temporary festive moment, as the Nethal once again was ruled by evil powers and those joyful memories suddenly disappeared. It is shocking.
The beginning and middle part of it looks praiseworthy, as in the middle part of the poetry, the people struggled and got freedom. But, ending would have been far better if Nethal had been run by its honest and hard working citizens.
The last and end of the poetry shocked me a little bit, and the story got turned into a awful and dreadful situation. This part, really, disturbs me personally, because citizens of Nethal fought for freedom and also got it, but for a moment.
To put it another way, people of Nethal did not get fruits of their sacrifice. "Truth always truimphs" did no fit here.
Hi Mr. Marathan!
Since the short poem took only five minutes to be written, I appreciate your efforts. Simple and average poem, though I like it. However, it could have been written better. All the best and keep it up.
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