This was a very haunting story of love & betrayal. You wrote it with quiet elegance. I was enthralled by the detail and the mastery of your story. I saw no mechanical or grammatical errors. I do hope you continue to write more wonderfully written pieces. The only thing I would maybe elaborate on is if he really had died or not. Pls keep writing and entertaining. You are quite wonderful at it.
This is a story of a boy who took a dare to not only prove to the bullies who dared him, but to prove to himself that he wasn't the coward they all believed him to be. It had great suspense, will he do it or chicken out at the last minute? Very well written for short fiction. I thoroughly enjoyed. Very nice writing. Keep up the good work. I didn't see any visible grammatical or mechanical errors. Nice job!
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