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Review of Thy Will Be Done  
Review by Krymzinrose
Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh, that epilogue nearly choked me up! To be a learning, evolving creature and never being able to reach the paradise you have been told about.

This story was a little technical for my tastes, but it was very well written. I saw a similarity to Star Trek with in it and liked that a lot.

I would work on adding more details, like what did the ship look like? that sort of thing. maybe balance the technical a bit more with mundane wording that is easier to understand.

all in all...well done!
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