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Review by LadyBrendragon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I thought that your approach was very original. At first she seemed to be daydreaming and then the city began to take on a life of its on. I liked your descriptions and the way that you tell the story without using any dialogue, yet still convey her feelings. Nice job.
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Review by LadyBrendragon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very good analogy on happiness and I like your simple statement that "Happiness is as simple as a sunrise or a sunset over a lake or ocean." As your article indicates, happiness is a state of mind. If we are content with what we have, we will be a lot happier. Instead we constantly search for what we do not have and lose sight of what is important like family and friends. Very nicely worded without being preaching. Including the info about Lottery winners was a very good example of what the love of money can do to some people.
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Review of My Soul Moves  
Review by LadyBrendragon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like the movement of your poem and you describe you soul moving through trees and mountains as well as through lives and souls. And how it dances to a music all its own that touches children and older people and survives the triumphs and the tragedies.
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Review of Be Still My Heart  
Review by LadyBrendragon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the line "dancing under moonlight bliss" but you don't indicate who or what is dancing. Example: waves dancing or we were dancing. I like the overall poem but this part was a little confusing to me, maybe not to someone else. I like the deep blue poetic ocean, it brings a image of dark turquoise waves softly lapping against the shore or even a ship. Very lovely poem.
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