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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hi there, new here so not sure of the polite way to do this. Just going to jump right in.

I think the concept, on the whole, is pretty good. The pacing and imagery is a bit patchy in places: particularly the beginning. I just didn't quite get what you were trying to convey visually and then you pointed some points, and foreshadowing, out painfully obviously. I also don't have much of a visual idea of the protagonist... I guess that's more of a personal thing but I think it helps win audience sympathy.

I like the dark undertones, the whole drug conspiracy and anti-hero pirates, but I think you need to work on sentence structure and you characters. They all read the same... I mean there's no real voice there.

hm.

I'd like to read an edited copy, this still feel like a draft to me.

Well, hope my input helps you.

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Josh
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