Interesting idea! I like the concept that Kelton is a psycic who can see the future, so the story starts out in the future, but ends up in the past with him altering the future. Totally strange! Have you thought about submitting this to Weird Tales Magazine? Here is a few things that I'm confused about: what exactly killed Nick and the station attendant? (it would have been creepier if I had known, I think); was the station attendant the same person as the "weird dude?"; and what is the significance of the golf theme? If you used golf only to have the word fore; it would seem a little too contrived for the story that he would end up in a trailer that would point to a golfing sign. Otherwize, totally weird.
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