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Review of Voices  
Review by Leo Rising
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good story. I get a clear sense of the tension and anxiety he feels as he goes deeper into the building.

The 'Clank' in the middle of the story amps up his fear. You might want to consider using an exclamation point after it, if it conveys what you want.

Last but not least... I can't find where you used the word prison in the story.

Very good use of 300 words. Good luck with your writing.


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