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Review by bill jane
Rated: E | (4.0)
The D man, is another word for greed, amarite. Thank for the brief history of Human selfishness.
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Review of Ode To Bob Dylan  
Review by bill jane
Rated: E | (3.5)
i like bob dylan tamborine man. I really don,t know what he did but that song really hits.


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Review of Fade Into Memory  
Review by bill jane
Rated: E | (4.5)
The past does not last
work on your craft and you will be the last one to laugh
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Review by bill jane
Rated: E | (2.0)
Not that she had been home much lately other than to get some clothes for her and Shelly. who is Shelly. Is this a continuation, where is the first part? Her high school self would be freaking out right about now. like spontaneously she would freak out, like she was on a timer, Because it never said he was in the room.did he magically appear. or did he walk through a door
. “She use to say that all the time to me. I don't know if this is genius or not, but this does not say she died I thought that she was sick or something. I, until the ending. Thought she was sick.
If your a mystery than this makes sense, if not then could you please inform the reader from the beginning that she died or ray came from the funeral.
he knew the moment that he finally kissed her three months after his mom's funeral, so? is everything before this in the past.
Yes, he wished his mom was still with them so that he could see her smile when they announced their engagement. What, I am very confused.In the beginning they don't know each other. because of the candle part ,and He was trying to distract her from the fact that he almost kissed her. know they are getting engaged, getting married. What. How well, do they know each other. There is no information that is saying they love each other. Until the ending. one more thing, just a little thing. next thing she knew she was staining his t-shirt. could you please tell me when they started hugging or was she flicking her tears at him.
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Review of I Am My Enemy  
Review by bill jane
Rated: E | (3.0)
I don't understand. what you are trying to do.
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