*Magnify*
SPONSORED LINKS
BY ONLINE AUTHORS
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/lillygrillzit/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/4
Review Requests: OFF
370 Public Reviews Given
371 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Passionate, and hungry reader. I try to feel the vibes of the writer, and review accordingly. A. We are all in this together. B. Encouragement, and Empathy followed here. C. I am not a perfect writer or grammarian D. Language works when it works. Communication on some level occurs.
I'm good at...
Cooking, ironing, gardening, digging for fossils, budgeting, photography, writing, reviewing drawing, painting, landscaping, erosion control, research. Spotting patterns, rhythms and minute differences within patterns. Data entry. Taxes. Environmental. Public Service, Problem Solving, Building Databases, Data Entry, finding Free Resources (legally), Brand Building, Social Media The price of my reviews is due to a high demand for reviews. I cannot help but give an in-depth review. Peace.
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Juvenile, Childrens, Y/A, Folklore, Story Telling, Native Spiritual, Genealogy, Golden Oldies Sci-Fi,
Least Favorite Genres
Outdated Non-Fiction
Favorite Item Types
Too many to name. I like original content that is "stranger than fiction" from the author's character's experiences. I love when stories pour from the imagination of the writer - and I feel it. Or learn something good.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry, because I am really a dive-bar, bathroom poet, and it is too structured.
I will not review...
I do not mean this ugly, please take this from a place of kindness and love - I read a lot. I have been reading a long time. I speed read. If asked to review an item that seems familiar to things read, I will check for plagiarism, and do. I will not review hard porn, poems (unless more prose than poem), nor plagiarized items. I will not call you out. If I turn your review down, it is not about you. It is me and life. Peace.
Public Reviews
Previous ... 1 2 3 -4- 5 6 ... Next
76
76
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


"Why I Write Children's Stories" is an inspiring article that not only answers the question of your title, but thoroughly and in a thoughtful way, you are teaching how dreams can come true. It is fortunate that as a teen you were so focused, and able to grasp "creativity" and "art" as a way of life. Being a problem child, meant breaking from your parental grasp, and seeking your own. It is their fault; they bought you the electric guitar! *ElecGuitar*

I am happy for your successes. It is gracious of you to share these dreams, and the way you went after them, making them become a reality. It is wonderful how you serenaded the woman of your dreams, had the family you craved, and finally, the way that you came up with stories for your girls, creating a kingdom of success for all of you. Success is not only money, and the new car, but happiness in your lot, and it sounds like you hit the jackpot; not by chance or luck, but because you created it.

Thank you for sharing this story of hope.

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
77
77
Review of Hello, Kitty!  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a review ordered for you at the Gift Shop of Addicted to WDC.

Honestly, when I first started reading "Hello Kitty", I was thinking, "This nice lady is going to take this pregnant cat in, who is going to end up having thirteen kittens..." The writing is good, the farting and snoring livened it up.

Then, instead of a typical clinging kittens become vampires saga, you twist the ending with a dog! Not only the dog startles the needy kitties away, but the amorous Mother cat, falls instantly for the pooch!

You pulled this story off like the mob. I know that writing for the prompts is a bit pressure filled, and writing next to other writers, going for the same contest is different than leisure writing. I am still chuckling over that ending.

Entertaining and unique.



' ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
78
78
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This review is for the Nuclear Package order of Aug 25, 2013

I love this story to pieces. For those of us who lived during the hey day of the Drive-In Movie, this brings back such memories. Your story invokes that niggling feeling in the back of my mind that always suspected the Drive-In was not the safest place to be. Someone would always get hurt, babies cried, cars with out of State tags, and the weird guy working the concession stands; you have it all.

This story could turn into a very cool scary movie.

**Technical questions - Time (?) When the story begins, 1975 Mustang (for a High School kid being able to drive a 1975 rag top mustang, when it was new is fairly rare, but I can see how you wanted it to stage time). At first I thought there was a contradiction, and I did research and found all of these things happened in 1975! Excellent, and difficult to do. Perhaps what threw me was the black & white television set, and the "Leave It to Beaver" reference, but they were popping in the 1970's as well, and many people still had black & white sets.

Thank you for this put together, and well written story. I will think about this for some time to come.

Write On.

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
79
79
Review of A Real Life fable  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


For Lobelia is truly blessed 's, "A Real Life fable" Wow. I am out of breath from the "harried Mother's" schedule. I would have run screaming from the situation, but with the couple, who prove to be a valuable team, they seem to pull everything off so smoothly.

I enjoyed the very long sentences of the harried mother's daily activity, and they work in this situation, because this is what is happening in her life. I am glad to see a mate in a family who cares enough about those he loves, to make unpopular decisions. Since this is more of a personal testimony, than a "short-story", I would say it is good. Some may say that some of the sentences run-on, but there are times that is called for.

Write on.



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
80
80
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a Review for the Gift Shop reviews requested for you - via Addicted to WDC

"The Life of Silver"  is a very telling prose. The first thing I think about when a person describes their life as Silver, is an older person, who has silver or gray hair, a couple passing a Silver Anniversary. I absolutely love what you have done in describing unique characteristics that are indeed "silver colored", but this is a shinning, gleaming, powerful Silver that is aged and wise - not dulled. For each season, silver is a life giving, and enhancing hue. Very good descriptions, and this continues to keep my interest, and "Life of Silver" remains folded into the wrinkles of my brain.

Thank you.

Write On.
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
81
81
Review of The Woman in Navy  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Review of "The Woman in Navy" 

This is an interesting story, filled with historic references. You show your writing skill well, as you wove the words to fit the photo. It would not surprise me to learn you turned this into a full novel.

Feedback: Luke wiped the last of the gravy in the chipped plate...(maybe off?)
She could hear the fast breaths flowing over her...(hear his fast breaths, and feel them...)

These comments are only from a reader's point of view, and are not meant to diminish or demean in any form or fashion, the amazing writing displayed in this piece. Take it or leave it.

You are gifted. Write on.


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
82
82
Review of hungry  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a review of "hungry"

rustywire, I am so glad to see your great story posted here. The Native tradition of storytelling is a gift that you are passing to others in the story of hungry and his family, and the life of The People, now that all of the bounty of the earth has been mowed under pavement and electric plants.

I think about hungry and his poor family often, since the first time you shared this tale. Your descriptions of each member of the family, their life, where they lived and traveled are a real to me as if I saw this myself.

I am sure that you are a gifted storyteller, and you write how you want to. Write those stories, and soon you will have a book to pass down to The Young People coming up, who are in need of these things.

Please let me know if you need anything from me as far as writing your stories.

I hold you in highest honor and respect.

Lori Latimer aka lillygrillzit
83
83
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This review is in celebration of WDC's 13th Birthday and your Anniversary!

"She Visits" is an enjoyable story about sisters who prove that the love of siblings is stronger than any of their rivalries. The descriptions of the extra niceties arranged by Elaine for Margaret are very good. The Spanish house built into the cave, and poor Charlie are easy to imagine with your use of words.

I like the moral of the story, that people are important not things, and for those who love each other, quality time spent together is priority. Happy Anniversary.


"Night Light Power" 


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
84
84
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This review is in celebration of Writing.com's 13th Birthday, and is in keeping with the philosophy of WDC in welcoming Newbies.

It is quite fun to be scared silly by something that cannot really hurt you. Any tale which includes fathers and sons bonding as men, out in nature, is a good story indeed.

My qualifications for reviewing come more from being a voracious reader than an expert on writing. I would suggest reading this aloud to yourself, making sure to read what is there, not what your muse pours out.

You have excellent descriptions. Try to add qualifying statements as part of the action...in the paragraph after..."so much for the full moon...". Instead of telling what he is thinking separately from the act of walking, try something like..."each step he took onto the spongy ground, made Kenneth think of those cheesy B Movies he used to watch,. Putting on a brave front for the boys, he kept expecting...."

Please keep in mind I am no expert, and you are gifted as a story teller. Do not let what I said discourage you in any way. Write On!

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
85
85
Review of Recovery  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


This review of your poem, "Recovery" is in celebration of WDC's 13th Birthday and in honor of your Anniversary.

This poem speaks of a person who is going through various stages of grieving, as part of the recovery process. It seemed most lines were one of some of the stages; denial, anger, and such sadness at the end, as the writer speaks of the child caught up in that mess.

I am not certain the work was finished...I hope the ending is the complete story of "recovery " The very best to you.

 
IMAGE
WDC Power Sig  (E)
A 'super hero' sig for the Power Group members to use in their reviews
#1386057 by Maryann



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
86
86
Review of Diggers  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


This is a review of "Diggers" for the Anniversary Review by An Addicted to WDC reviewer.

Diggers is an interesting tale of three criminals who profit by obtaining cadavers for a research lab. There is the big boss man who hires by force two unwitting fools, willing to make a few bucks the hard way. It seems as if the two; Gil and Murphy become captives more than employees.

This story has good bones (no pun intended :0) ) - As a reader, I would like to give my feedback.
* Time / Era? I was confused, because when Thomas La Barbe is drinking Hostetter's Medicinal Stomach Bitters, I am thinking late 1700's, or 1800's. That may have been intentional.
* As the story progresses, there are technical terms, and slang that is modern
* At the end it seems as if the world is dystopian - Again, I could not grasp the background of time.
* Format - Complete spaces between paragraphs make for an easier-on-the-eyes read.

I am not an expert, and my feedback can be ignored or taken - You are obviously a wordsmith, well read, and knowledgeable. Happy Anniversary - Write On!


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
87
87
Review of Stormstruck  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a review in honor of A Week of 13 - WDC's Thirteenth Anniversary!

"Stormstruck" is a good story. There is much more going on in this story, than wondering if there is life after a lightening strike. Those words take on a multiple-layer meaning after reading to the end of the story.

Sofia's character is well developed. Dialog is well done. I seemed to miss Ali's name until later in the story, and she begs more description, because she is such a major player of the catalysis. This is just a personal opinion, I am no expert. I would recommend breaking up your paragraphs for an easier to read format.

Welcome to Writing Dot Com, I hope you are here to celebrate the next big event.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
88
88
Review of 7-11  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (5.0)
"A Week of 13" is an incentive to join in the 13th Birthday Celebration!

The formatting and graphics are eye catching. The rules and instructions to be one (or more) of the 91 winners chosen during the seven days of the WDC Birthday Bash are easy enough, even a caveman* could understand it. (*GEICOtm)

Seven days, thirteen reviews per day in varying time slots will be chosen.

Copying & Pasting for reviews is not acceptable, and are ruled as non-qualifying reviews.

Good Luck.
89
89
Review of Alas  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


This is a review of, "I Would of..."

This poem would not let me be. "Alas" is defined as a word used in the expression of grief, sorrow, regret, and apprehension of evil, and/or danger.(thefreedictionary. com). Loved, Cried and Died. The sorrow is real.

I am now drawn to check out more of your work. You have a new fan. Happy WDC Anniversary.

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
90
90
Review of Dear Me  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*
Happy Belated WDC Birthday / Anniversary! 8.23 day.

I was searching for a last few reviews for the month, and found you on. WDC Power Reviewers Birthday and on WDC Anniversary.

Review: Dear Murc, the letter written to you, by you is interesting. You are kind and gentle toward yourself and give yourself an intensive pep talk, facts and advice. "Dear Me"works well as a letter format. I think the structure and layout of the letter are well plotted and executed.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
91
91
Review of Deception  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a random review -

It is a show of skill, to be able to tell months, and possibly years worth of plot in a short story, especially in under 300 words. The way you used format to slip in and out of time, and change areas was well done. You had me hooked right away. Now I am curious about the story of Kara, Arnie, the war, the Major, the children's hospital and all. Excellent writing. I love this. It is very entertaining.


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
92
92
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is my review for The Fourth Wall - Chapter 1

This is an interesting tale. I read it through twice. The second time, I imagined comic book squares of the art work in graphic novels. This story will be much easier to handle as a comic. This item is deep, in how Lottie sneaked off to play like a boy, doing what made her feel alive...against her family's wishes.

I am going to think about this for some time to come. There are a few typos. I am no expert and need an editor full time. But I am a voracious reader, and this has great bones (structure, characters, background, ball field, descriptions - all good. Write on!


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
93
93
Review of The Weekend  
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


This is an honest look at love matured. This is a snapshot of a couple on the journey of relationship. Everything is not perfect, and nothing going on with the pair in this story is terrible. This is excellent writing. The characters are believable, the dialog is woven expertly.


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
94
94
Review of Lunchtime at Camp  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


When I first started reading this story, I thought it was about terrible grub, or food fights. It is so much more. For some reason the terms cafeteria and lunch lady, caused me tension and the urge to flight - shortly thereafter, I recognized the signs of my PTSD. It sounds like a bunch of grown-up bullies, spend their summers continuing to bully.

Your article touched my emotions, because some adults in areas of trust do not act right. Thank you for talking about it, it will touch a lot of people.


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
95
95
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a review for my Weekly Goals-1949474 10 qualifying reviews.

Thank you for writing this highly valuable article. There are a lot of books which seek to address the question asked by new, and old-salt writers alike, "How do you write a query letter?"- Coincidentally, last night a few of us writers went to open-mike night to read. After we were done performing we talked about...writing query letters. I forwarded this and shared it on Facebook with a couple of writer friends.

This article is a tool for any writer who is interested in getting published, and wants to get Paid more for their excellent content and creativity. I did not discuss the mechanics of the good information given, because it needs to be read, and reread by those who want to learn how to sell their work.

* Keep this bookmarked.
*"What to do" verses "
*"What Not to do"

As writers, we have imagination and flare. We understand "do's", but love exploring the corners of "Don't". The examples of letters show what would work toward publication, or a query that gets rejected.

This is a gift to all writers. Thank you again.
96
96
Review of Weekly Goals  
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Let me be the first to review and give kudos for the new Writing Dot Com (WDC) - "Weekly Goals Forum," hosted by the StoryMistress. This forum is a natural progression from a more casual forum where Writers were open to post their goals for the week work hard to meet the goals, then come back on Friday to report on how their goals were met or not.

Posting weekly goals for anyone, in any walk of life, is a key ingredient for success. When a person publicly shares their goals with friends, group members, or any other person, it raises the bar, because then we are agreeing to be held accountable.

One of my favorite quotes regarding business matters is from an unknown author, "People do not do what you expect, they do what you inspect." This is true. Speaking of truth, and accountability, goals and follow-through will be monitored, so this is not an easy way to get points for nothing.
97
97
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


I can only imagine how difficult it must be to transmute such a journey of time and spirit into a short story. Within this story, you have written excellent imagery. I can form pictures in my head from what you have described. You are lucky to have experienced such vivid flashes of revelation.

Thank you for sharing. Happy anniversary.

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
98
98
Review of WINGS LIKE EAGLES  
for entry "Invalid Entry" 
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


The US Prison System in your folder The Lighthouse Life is a common sense essay on the terrible inequity of how punishments vs crimes are meted out. Our world is topsy turvey for sure. It is a fact that prisons are the number one growth industry, and a person will be punished less for a brutal and violent crime than a financial crime. Good essay Happy WDC Anniversary / Birthday


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
99
99
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: E | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


EEEEEEKKKKK!! Very scary. I am attempting to keep up review all August Anniversaries, and in some cases it is difficult. You arexan award winning writer, who is well traveled, multilingual and you are an expert in dialogue.

This story had many scientific terms of ghost chasing, which sets up the terrifying twist at the end. Excellent work! The finale caught me off guard. This a terrifying tapestry woven by an expert word weaver. Thanks for the chills.

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **



*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
100
100
In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" *CakeP*


Happy Belated Anniversary / Birthday

Had it not been for the Anniversary Reviews, I may have never found this well written, and hard hitting story. What a twist... Makes a person wonder how much is fed to those of us who depend on media for our information. Eddie - what a tough old bird. I will think about this story for a long time to come.

Many of us are forever in search of Sardan.

The story is very well writing, your descriptions feed all of the senses; sight, sound, scent and personality of the characters. I imagine I can see Eddie, and smell him as well. I am repeating myself, but it is true - Good Writing.


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **


*Gold* My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
139 Reviews · *Magnify*
Page of 6 · 25 per page   < >
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/lillygrillzit/sort_by/r.review_creation_time DESC/page/4