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370 Public Reviews Given
371 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
Passionate, and hungry reader. I try to feel the vibes of the writer, and review accordingly. A. We are all in this together. B. Encouragement, and Empathy followed here. C. I am not a perfect writer or grammarian D. Language works when it works. Communication on some level occurs.
I'm good at...
Cooking, ironing, gardening, digging for fossils, budgeting, photography, writing, reviewing drawing, painting, landscaping, erosion control, research. Spotting patterns, rhythms and minute differences within patterns. Data entry. Taxes. Environmental. Public Service, Problem Solving, Building Databases, Data Entry, finding Free Resources (legally), Brand Building, Social Media The price of my reviews is due to a high demand for reviews. I cannot help but give an in-depth review. Peace.
Favorite Genres
Mystery, Juvenile, Childrens, Y/A, Folklore, Story Telling, Native Spiritual, Genealogy, Golden Oldies Sci-Fi,
Least Favorite Genres
Outdated Non-Fiction
Favorite Item Types
Too many to name. I like original content that is "stranger than fiction" from the author's character's experiences. I love when stories pour from the imagination of the writer - and I feel it. Or learn something good.
Least Favorite Item Types
Poetry, because I am really a dive-bar, bathroom poet, and it is too structured.
I will not review...
I do not mean this ugly, please take this from a place of kindness and love - I read a lot. I have been reading a long time. I speed read. If asked to review an item that seems familiar to things read, I will check for plagiarism, and do. I will not review hard porn, poems (unless more prose than poem), nor plagiarized items. I will not call you out. If I turn your review down, it is not about you. It is me and life. Peace.
Public Reviews
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for entry "Prologue" 
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I like this page, there is a lot going on here, and it makes me want to read further. It seemed that the line, "rushed the offensive" is a sports move, and takes the reader from an era of Space travel and brings them back to 2010/11 football season.

One other thing I would suggest is to re-think the over-use of the same words; specifically twit. There are hundreds of words that can be swapped for twit.

These suggestions are all with all due respect to your writing talent, which shows. I would never mean to cause pain or hurt the writer's feelings. I assume you are wanting reviews.

Good Luck
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
There are living characters showing themselves within the paragraphs of this cover. One of my first favorite genre's were science fiction.

I read Ray Bradbury, Isaac Asimov, some of the Star Trek series. After about 300 different books, all of the plots started sounding the same to me.

This happened with Romance too. Your writing is unique, and lively. This theme just seems like another predictable Science fiction story to me. Any failing is my own fault. I will continue reading through the links, as hard work always pays off. :0)
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Review of House of Solitude  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hauntingly beautiful prose. Well written, and filled with imagery of style. Congratulations.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this story. I like when a piece has so much going on that I must re-read it once or twice, to pick up any nuances I missed the first time through. I love the parallel of machine/man vs race/religion, and the way you pulled this off.

"...And anger raged throughout the world for such like pairings. From the pulpits and statehouses, from courthouses and street corners, the cries rang out. Unnatural, they proclaimed. A travesty in the face of that which is good and wholesome, they protested. An abomination, they shouted..."

It seems as if this is where you are transitioning from the positive good love, to the conflict of hate, prejudice, and evil. it has the thrust of your emotion here, it is like the hinge that opens the door.

Do what you want with language, it works. go for it. A suggestion, if you keep "And" give her an apostrophe, but I would bring 'pairings, or pulpits' in the lead of this stanza, because this is what causes the conflict. Just my opinion. Write On!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for the very clear and easy to follow instructions.

It is very nice that you included other ways of marketing ourselves as writers. I recently ordered from Vista Print, the cards were free, I just had to pay postage. It is so important to network, and you have shown that it this nice informational for WDC.
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Review of Meeting the past  
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoy the chance meeting. I had to re-read several times the line, "...a mother, daughter and son".

This was a meeting that is close enough to what can and does occur every day possibly. Especially, if a meeting happens with anyone we ever had a crush on, or thought highly of a person will be filled with all of our thoughts, or the story we wrote about this relationship in our mind.

Congratulations, good start. Write on!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this short scary story. May I emphasize SCARY? The only bad thing about this short, is I want more. I feel like I was given a peek at a portion of a good Koontz book or something, and now I want to read it. Teaser.

Good work, always keep your readers wanting more.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a lot of fun. It was not too hard, and was not as easy as I assumed this would be. I like doing quick puzzles like this. It is good brain exercise.
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Review of A Weeping Earth  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I feel this piece. "...paving roads...weathering stone...creation and destruction..." this continuance of earth's recycling herself. She must weep now. Hopefully, you will continue to write and let your words touch others. Perhaps with your beautiful words being felt, you will cause empathy toward earth. I hope.

write on.
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Review of First Light  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Beautiful. Your words create an imagery both in my mind and within my senses. "I am warmed by the light while cold ground bites my toes." Your descriptions of nature show an ambivalent feeling about nature. Yes, it is beautiful, but let us not forget it is wild.

A writer within a story, excellent. Cannot wait to read more.
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Review of Camping Trip  
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a good story. Your characters are lively and it left me wanting more. I am going to think about this for a long time. I am curious, and this piece makes me want to sit and interview you and John.

Camping Trip is considered high content, you are a good writer. Give us more, please.
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Review of Letter Box Face  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Letter Box Face
A perfect snapshot of LBF. Whoa, your words created a photograph of a moment in a mans existence when this character was unguarded, and he thought no one was looking.

Excellent word smithing. Write on.
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Review of Freedom Call  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I feel these words. There are Native performers who I can imagine shouting these words. I love your message. This gets a highest rating because you are going to change the world with your good words. Perhaps no one has listened before, but now there is an audience of anticipating readers, waiting to read your work.

ALL CAPS is shouting. There is a time to shout, and dance and drum and march. And then, it becomes the time for leaders to rise up, pen in hand, or today keyboard under fingers. Time to influence and inspire.

The words you use are good. You communicate well, let the words and you speak. Write on. :0)
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Review of Comment-In-A-Box  
Rated: E | (4.0)
As a newbie, it is helpful to read these guidelines. For the very new writer, who has a spark of somethings special, this rating may be a bit harsh.

It is understood that many e-writers are overwhelmed with writing their own content, marketing themselves and others on the web is time consuming. When there are hundreds of items to be read, it is a bit of a pain to read bad writing, but I think when there is a good start, rate low, but give encouragement.

Thank you for sharing these guidelines for rating.
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