This is so true! I believe all mother’s go through this, me being one of them. A few things jumped out at me that I thought you may want to fix. These are only suggestions. I have highlighted some of the typo’s and put a suggestion next to it. Try not to use the same word so many times so close together, such as “doesn‘t“. I also suggest not to start a sentence with “But” or “And”.
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It used to be that id(I’d) be awake at one AM and the party was just really getting good, I was just catching a good buzz and the nightlife was happening!!!
Now(,) those days are long gone. When someone asks me what I wish for, I wish for sleep. I even dream of getting sleep. But Right now, it's yet another night up with the little person who just doesnt(doesn’t) seem to care what time it is. She doesn't care because she doesn't have a care in the world and can sleep whenever she wants to. (space between paragraphs)
I walk into her room and she is sitting up in her crib just grinning from ear to ear. I know that if I smile at her then she will laugh and I will laugh, and(make two sentences) then the idea of her going back to sleep will lessen. But Come on, how can you not smile at your little angel that seems to be so happy to see you? Ahhhh, such is life as a mother. (space}
You are irritated that you have only slept for three hours, that you had to literally drag yourself to an upright position and(take out and put a comma) (,) throw yourself out of bed and into your slippers. And You want nothing more then(than) to crawl right back into your warm bed. But(take out period and put a comma, add sentences together) on the other hand, This(this) little smiling bundle of joy is awake and she wants to play with her mommy. So, I give in. I go into her room, walk up to her crib and return her great big loving smile! We share some coos and giggles. I hug and(take out “and”, put a comma) kiss her and sweetly tell her that (it) is is(one to many) time to be sleeping.
I wrap her all snug in her blanky and I quietly walk out hoping that she will go back to sleep. (space)
These are the moments that I will always remember! The moments that will forever be imprinted upon my heart! My late nights with my smiling angel! (space)
And Now that she appears to be asleep again, im(I’m) gonna try to get some sleep myself! : )
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This is a very good description of a mother’s late night’s or at least the happy one’s, but those are the one’s we want to remember. Keep up the good work!
Very emotional. I believe many people feel the same way, me being one of them. A gerbil on his wheel running around and around and not getting anywhere. We just have to hold our heads high, do the best we can, and accept the hardships of life.
Good job. This poem will make her feel loved. I have a few suggestions. Add commas, periods and you don't have to capitalize every line, just the beginning of a new senence. Good job on the paragraphs. If you would like a more in depth review, let me know. I'm not perfect on poems, but I will tell you what I know. Now, these are only suggestions. Use them if you like. It is up to you. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem. Keep up the good work! Write on!
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Good job! This poem reminds me of those days when I used to sit and wait for my husband to call, before we were married. We will be happily married with two wanderful children on December 9th for 6 years, together for 9 years! It is memories like this that we cherish for a life time.
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This is so true! I believe all mother’s go through this, me being one of them. A few things jumped out at me that I thought you may want to fix. These are only suggestions. I have highlighted some of the typo’s and put a suggestion next to it. Try not to use the same word so many times so close together, such as “doesn‘t“. I also suggest not to start a sentence with “But” or “And”.
Good job. Very dark and emotional.