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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Description, mood and characters were good, and the dialogue (despite being staged) was rather believable. You also did a good job of showing, not telling. Throughout, the story was very interesting and didn't break my attention.

However, the best part was certainly the ending. Though throughout I considered this a regular ENF story, Heather the exposed victim, the staging of the entire event was very clever and seriously threw me for a loop. The group of friends were very interesting, and the reveal was set up perfectly as well. By the end, I was very interested in the group's further escapades because I really fell for the characters and their interesting dynamics with each other, even though I had spent the first half of the story hating Gina and Tony. I would in fact be very interested in such a sequel where Gina loses her bikini top, and even further "missions".

I truly enjoyed this. If there's anything I could say, it's that the story was a bit longer than it had to be. I think some extraneous words or sentences could be trimmed down. That said, thanks for writing, and I hope to see more from you!
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