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Review of Larkin's Ranch  
for entry "Chapter 1 Searching" 
Review by Mari
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
I can tell this is going to be a very good story.

I like Jenna. She is timid, yet, she seems to have a lot of curiosity inside of her that's itching to be set free. I can't wait to see where she takes us.

Noah, he's a little flirt..lol. What was he thinking driving down the road like a raving maniac? It's nice how he helped Jenna and I can certainly feel the attraction between the two of them.

I do have a question for you to consider. With Jenna being eighteen...Does she really need permission from her folks to accept this job? I can understand her wanting their approval but I don't really think she needs their permission. My son is eighteen and he was so proud when he came and told me he'd taken a job at Starbucks, but he didn't ask me first. Just something to think about.

You have a very good story here. Keep writing. I'll be looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Mari
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