I like Jenna. She is timid, yet, she seems to have a lot of curiosity inside of her that's itching to be set free. I can't wait to see where she takes us.
Noah, he's a little flirt..lol. What was he thinking driving down the road like a raving maniac? It's nice how he helped Jenna and I can certainly feel the attraction between the two of them.
I do have a question for you to consider. With Jenna being eighteen...Does she really need permission from her folks to accept this job? I can understand her wanting their approval but I don't really think she needs their permission. My son is eighteen and he was so proud when he came and told me he'd taken a job at Starbucks, but he didn't ask me first. Just something to think about.
You have a very good story here. Keep writing. I'll be looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Mari
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